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Re: hopefully, it is so dark because you were so young. Young people
hear hear...i think it's a teen thing to be dark...lol, was 15 back then. alas, i totally appreciate your guys' comments.
rather tell me what you think i can do to improve my writing, than just keep quiet and i keep on thinking i'm doing a good job, when it's not.
lekka.
*raven*
posted by
polarcontradict
on February 14, 2008 at 10:16 PM
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Re: Good stuff, polarcontradict. However, as a one-time editor, I must point
any comment is good comment. appreciate it that you showed me my mistake. thanx
posted by
polarcontradict
on February 14, 2008 at 10:14 PM
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hopefully, it is so dark because you were so young. Young people
write darkly, very often, I find here on Blogit.
I am old and an editor in a past life, so, like saul-relative, I wanted to point out the ceased, but visualized the birds' wings seizing up and could actually handle that image, 'ceasing' to move because they 'seized'.
Young hearts seize mucho and their dreams seize up, too.
posted by
benzinha
on February 14, 2008 at 6:26 PM
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posted by
AlienFemale
on February 14, 2008 at 2:19 PM
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Seize to Love.
posted by
WindTapper
on February 14, 2008 at 11:38 AM
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posted by
contagion_publishing
on February 14, 2008 at 10:50 AM
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Good stuff, polarcontradict. However, as a one-time editor, I must point
out that your use of the words "seize" and "seized" should be "cease" and "ceased". You can delete this comment if you'd like. Just thought you'd like to know...
posted by
saul_relative
on February 14, 2008 at 7:19 AM
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I liked your take on time. sam
posted by
sam444
on February 14, 2008 at 6:54 AM
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Thoughtful
Thanks for sharing! It's always interesting to look at old work.
posted by
NightMajik
on February 14, 2008 at 6:54 AM
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