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I went back and read again.
1. (as stupid as this might sound) I did not realize that it was a journal. I have read plenty of books where the time/date is the chapter title. Knowing that, did make a difference. Words like book and thriller make me assume a traditional story will be told. I have read Silvia Plath all the way through, but never tried Joyce. (engineering
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2. If it is a journal, it is still somewhat confusing on my quick skim, because it has multiple viewpoints. How does Clere know what D. is saying to Jono to journal it? I thought it was from Clere's viewpoint. Perhaps she does, although that is not apparent, if it is a journal. Or if she is imagining, that is not addressed by this particular page. That could be fixed by changing the preview pages.
I hope that helps, and I apologize for things that I should see, but did not due to the skimming, noise here, divided attention, etc.
posted by
FactorFiction
on July 29, 2007 at 4:04 PM
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thanks survivormom......yes - i imagine that is who my target audience are
and you found the blurb sufficient. thanks - that is encouraging.
posted by
Jaahda
on July 29, 2007 at 9:08 AM
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i guess also factorfirction ..........after thoughts here
i was one of those weirdos who actually enjoyed james joyce - and found him inspiring. he rambles. my book has no physical spaces in it - it is all internal dialogue. someone else said it was sylvia plath like. i wish i could illicit more debate really - i need to 'concretize' this book baby.
posted by
Jaahda
on July 29, 2007 at 9:06 AM
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i'm glad you did factorfiction....i'm lost with this - it is so new.
i really cant think how not to make the preview choppy. it is written in a journal type style. thanks for food for thought - you got any clues on how to remedy. and i don't imagine it to be much like how i write on here. it was written a long time ago - and was not particularly 'topic focused' at the time - except by journal.
posted by
Jaahda
on July 29, 2007 at 9:03 AM
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I did not reaed the original, but I went and looked at the blurb
and the excerpts.
I am surprised that you wrote this - not because of the content but because of the construct of the content. I found it confusing and choppy. Perhaps there are excerpts that are more like your posts (not so "artsy") that you could put up online? My thoughts on reading were that I could not read a whole book in that style because it would be frustrating. And there is no clue as to whether the whole book was in the style shown or just portions.
I know that that is a disappointing thing to read, and I hope that it does not come out too harsh without facial expressions, etc. to know that I am not intending to be mean/hurtful/etc. 
I am pretty much known for saying what I think and not what just what someone wants to hear.
posted by
FactorFiction
on July 29, 2007 at 7:50 AM
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Just some thoughts from me...
...not that I'm an expert on book publishing. 
The preview section definitely makes me want to read more...and your blurb draws you into the story and, as a survivor of not only abuse, but the "craziness" that follows, I would think women who connect to this story will eventually buy it and it will spread more word of mouth.
As a buyer, I usually go off what the blurb is. Women in general would be drawn to this book I would think, but especially those with an abusive background. It may just need time before the buys start rolling. But I'll definitely pass the word around myself for ya!
posted by
SurvivorMom
on July 27, 2007 at 10:02 AM
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