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Thanks for the advice
Thank you Madamoiselle and Trisha. I will make it a point to split it into smaller, easier to digest sections.
Being as this is my first attempt at blogging with my writing, I am rather new at the game and have much to learn.
Thanks again,
Dghowler
posted by
Dghowler
on May 11, 2007 at 10:08 AM
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Starts as a nice story
Mademoiselle is right it will be easier split up.
good work!
posted by
trisha4005
on May 10, 2007 at 10:23 PM
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Nice spelling by me (in that previous comment).
Sorry about that.
So I'd open each cage. I'd unlock every pen,
let the animals go, and start over again.
And, somehow or other, I think I could find
Some beasts of a much more un-usual kind.
posted by
Mademoiselle
on May 10, 2007 at 9:33 PM
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It is good.
However, might I suggest you divide it up into slightly smaller (and therefore, less daunting) sections?
Also, that way, you could then post more often, too (to increse potential readership).
The lions and tigers and that kind of stuff
They have up here now are not quite good enough.
You see things like these in just any old zoo.
They're awfully old-fashioned. I want something new!
posted by
Mademoiselle
on May 10, 2007 at 9:30 PM
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posted by
star4sky5
on May 10, 2007 at 7:57 PM
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