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posted by
Antonionioni
on April 7, 2007 at 11:06 AM
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Your poem actually enables one to picturise what you are writing about
posted by
Straightforward
on April 7, 2007 at 7:38 AM
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it's so deep!
what an emotion you shared! 
posted by
pelagus
on April 7, 2007 at 5:16 AM
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Tony
I could just see you and her.. that moment.. very good Tony!!!!
posted by
Blue_feathers
on April 7, 2007 at 5:09 AM
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Actually I think Bhaskar used a better word
I said passion. He said violence. I think it was a sort of violence that you were witness to in that moment back then. That's what makes it squeamish and, probably, disturbing.
posted by
Discombobulated78
on April 7, 2007 at 4:52 AM
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Hi Wiley - I was with my daughter at the time - she drinks lemonade.
Also, the environment was kind of goody-goody - not the place to get drunk - the prices at that concert hall are shocking, too!
posted by
Antonionioni
on April 7, 2007 at 1:50 AM
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Star - hello!
posted by
Antonionioni
on April 7, 2007 at 1:47 AM
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Thanks very much HD!
posted by
Antonionioni
on April 7, 2007 at 1:46 AM
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Thank you Jacenta - Happy Easter to you too!!
posted by
Antonionioni
on April 7, 2007 at 1:46 AM
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Tonyzonit
Oh you sure know how to put it down man. I saw a lady play Flamenco music in North Africa a long time ago but I never could have written about it with such flowing graceful poetry. Oh, and you actually had just a glass of beer? Dang that upset me, but of course as an alcoholic sobered up, it would.LOL I nver could see how folks drank one glass of alcohol.
posted by
WileyJohn
on April 6, 2007 at 8:24 PM
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wow
posted by
star4sky5
on April 6, 2007 at 6:42 PM
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Hi
You've got quite a way with words! Such a refreshing approach to poetry.
posted by
HDElijah4
on April 6, 2007 at 4:46 PM
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Tonyzonit
Wow! Great poem capture of a fleeting moment in time. I definitely enjoyed reading your poem, Tony. Have a nice Easter.
posted by
jacentaOld
on April 6, 2007 at 3:49 PM
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Oh dear - go further south! Go loco in Acapulco!
posted by
Antonionioni
on April 6, 2007 at 3:17 PM
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Tony
A day for ducks, then? I THOUGHT I would miss all the snow this winter by living in Florida for six months. Joke's on me! --Joy!Mary
posted by
FoliageGold
on April 6, 2007 at 3:04 PM
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Thank goodness for the Gulf Stream (over here in the UK), Mary!
I've only seen one snowfall this winter, and it was a s dark fell, so I could n't make snowballs or anything. By morning it was all gone...
posted by
Antonionioni
on April 6, 2007 at 3:00 PM
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Tony
You're welcome! Lucky you! Here it's been snowing cold, white sand all day. --Joy! Mary
posted by
FoliageGold
on April 6, 2007 at 2:31 PM
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OOh, thanks Mary. I've had lots of flowers and blossom today!
posted by
Antonionioni
on April 6, 2007 at 2:27 PM
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Tony
Ah, I see. That's very interesting. The Japanese often paint blossoms as well and they're so lovely. The blossoming of ones' life....... yes, I guess you're right. --Joy!Mary
Just for that, you may have two!
posted by
FoliageGold
on April 6, 2007 at 2:25 PM
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Mary - the real blossom, I mean!
I've just been reading about Japanese poetry - mainly haiku and similar forms, where there's a strong focus on the beauty and transience of nature. The author describes how not just the poets but ordinary people over there stand and stare at the cherry blossom, agonising over its temporary beauty. lives are often compared to blossoms or flower petals. That's what I had in mind!
posted by
Antonionioni
on April 6, 2007 at 2:21 PM
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Tony
Why will it be gone? --Joy!Mary
posted by
FoliageGold
on April 6, 2007 at 2:12 PM
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Yes, Discom, you have understood it exactly.
Although I'm not THAT bourgeois a person, I was probably trying to be, and it was punctured at least momentarily!
posted by
Antonionioni
on April 6, 2007 at 2:11 PM
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Hello MandaLee - thanks - hope you're having a good Good Friday!
posted by
Antonionioni
on April 6, 2007 at 2:09 PM
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Troosha - thanks.
I was inspired by listening to some Spanish guitar while ironing. That brought the memory to the fore. Otherwise it may have been about the crucifixion, I guess.
posted by
Antonionioni
on April 6, 2007 at 2:09 PM
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Bhaskar - how can you not be?!! Biff bang pow.
posted by
Antonionioni
on April 6, 2007 at 2:07 PM
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Thanks Afzal - it was a very pasionate moment!
posted by
Antonionioni
on April 6, 2007 at 2:06 PM
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Thanks, Mary - I dig the blossom. Soon it'll be gone...
posted by
Antonionioni
on April 6, 2007 at 2:06 PM
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Thanks, Neil - hope you're having a good Good Friday!!!
posted by
Antonionioni
on April 6, 2007 at 2:04 PM
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You've done very well
I can only imagine the passion, yet the squeamishness of the intimacy of that moment. To be comfortable in the "Bourgeois smugness down pat" (LOVED that bit), and suddenly thrust into the bittersweetness of this experience. Or at least it would be bittersweet to me.
posted by
Discombobulated78
on April 6, 2007 at 1:50 PM
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posted by
Amanda__
on April 6, 2007 at 11:59 AM
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Tony
You describe her ability to express her passion through those strings so vividly. This is fabulous - one of your best in my eyes.
posted by
Troosha
on April 6, 2007 at 11:31 AM
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Me too, Tony...am always blown away by violence.
posted by
Bhaskar.ing
on April 6, 2007 at 10:47 AM
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It's written very passionately .
posted by
afzal50
on April 6, 2007 at 8:56 AM
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Tony
She sure did startle you, didn't she? Gee, a whole sonnet about the moment. Well done. --Joy!Mary
posted by
FoliageGold
on April 6, 2007 at 6:41 AM
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powerful.Thanksforobserving; and comforting support. ShalomonGoodFriday
posted by
ILLUMINATI8
on April 6, 2007 at 6:30 AM
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