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Thanks TAPS
I think I may have sent you the art work mam, if not I will,
thank you again for showing interest friend. Mike 
posted by
lionladroar
on October 16, 2006 at 10:27 AM
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lionladroar, I really like this piece of artwork. Also I wish to commend you for your voluntary work in the lives of these men. What a great thing you are doing. God bless you for it.
posted by
TAPS.
on October 14, 2006 at 4:18 PM
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I Totally agree friends
Firstly,I must thank you all again for your encouragement and help, held within your reviews of my humble poems thus far, I believe advice given freely is a sign of caring, a from of help. If the receiver lets pride get in the way, he or she, maybe missing out on knowledge that was the last piece in the jigsaw puzzle they had been searching for. Pride and Jealousy are brother and sister, they walk hand in hand, most people I have known talk of the importance in defeating jealousy i.e ( The Green Eyed Monster ) but hardly never of the Idol worshiping wrapped up in pride ? That of ourselves, I have many times let pride grab hold of the rein of my decisions, on the odd occasion still do, no ones perfect ! Mike
posted by
lionladroar
on October 13, 2006 at 12:44 AM
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Troosha, I like it but I don't , if you know what I mean.
I have to swallow my pride first and then I listen but not to everyone. First you have to earn my trust, and I am not going to swallow every word people say, they have to justify their statement and be specific. If people don't like what i do, this is their priviledge, I never argue with people's tastes and preference, but if I don't know why, I cannot learn from that person.
posted by
marieclaire66
on October 12, 2006 at 10:30 PM
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ooops. I was saying the French are a lazy bunch... not the brits
Hope I did not come across wrong. I think I am going to get into trouble here... Please I don't want to start a new trend, keep telling me nice things about my poems... Ha ha. Can she take as good as she gives??? I get so easily offended and yet I dish it up to others, not fair is it?
posted by
marieclaire66
on October 12, 2006 at 10:27 PM
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Marieclaire
Didn't know you liked or valued "constructive criticism". Good on you. Yes... albeit this piece was strong and delivered a good message, it could have been tightened up a tad, Lion. Marieclaire gave me the confidence to say that (don't get me wrong - When I read it I was left almost speechless). And that's a good thing.
posted by
Troosha
on October 12, 2006 at 6:53 PM
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Lionladroar, the Brits should take a leaf off the French book...
They are a lazy loud mouth bunch, always on strike... but you know they also know how to take time to enjoy life more. The thirty five hour week is incredible...it cripples the country in some ways, but at the same time, there are so many benefits mainly more time spent with the family, rather than chasing the elusive dollar/pound. Some people say they would rather work harder and earn more money rather than have more time...amazing.
posted by
marieclaire66
on October 12, 2006 at 5:45 PM
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Phew, nobody is going to shoot me for opening my big mouth.
I am always weary of dishing up criticisms, because I don't really feel qualified for it, and we could easily retort, what does she know, she is not even a native speaker...I just hope that we can all swallow our pride and listen, not necessarily agree but at least listen. I mainly comment on the form rather the content/ideas, the ideas are the prerogative of the writer, but the way they are conveyed sometimes can do with a little tinkering. Thank you for not taking umbrage to what I am saying. I would love to fix your spelling too, but this is almost your trademark, and it is kind of endearing so I leave it alone... oooops, sorry another criticism. I do love your poetry and you know that, so remember the positive first and foremost.
posted by
marieclaire66
on October 12, 2006 at 5:41 PM
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Hi Tony
Yes when one of our own creations are criticized, this can hurt our pride, though if it is well meant friend, usually this gives us another view of our own work, its then up too us if we act upon the view of the reviewer. I have many times, also many times not. Thanks Tony for all your reviews and comments, I appreciate them. Mike
posted by
lionladroar
on October 12, 2006 at 2:48 PM
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Hello Mike
It was brave of MC to mention this - there should be more of this - not just to you, but all of us. But in most cases we are there to support each other. We don't know whether our criticism is well-judged or not, so we are very sparing with it. I might think one thing, but I'm not the poet. Anyway, as regards the themes, as ever, they come through. Quite a few layers there, based around the same general idea. Your poems are highly individual. That is one of their strengths. Cheers Mike
posted by
Antonionioni
on October 12, 2006 at 2:21 PM
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Hi Marieclair, I welcome peoples help in criticisms of my poems mam
and I agree with yours mam, yes my poem needs some nips and tucks, I will make them, after all it is rare for a poem too stay in the form it was first written. I can only think of one or two I have not changed or fiddled with over time, in reading them again. Thank you also for your encouragement friend. Mike
posted by
lionladroar
on October 12, 2006 at 2:03 PM
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I go along with Troosha. we get our priorities mixed up.
I think parents are just too tired and harassed to think straight and they are not necessarily being unloving, just stressed out and overwhelmed...Your last two paragraphs are the most poignant. Perhaps you could trim and condense your poem a little and give it the power and impact it deserves. I like some of the expressions you use here. It is good of you to spare some of your precious times for the troubled youth of this world. Some are seriously lacking in a serious father figure and healthy role model.
I think you exposed the problem well, and also hinted at the solution. It needs tightening up in structure... but who am I to judge? I hate critcizing other people's poem, but sometimes I wished people were not so kind to me and not spare my feelings and give me a true and honest assessment of what I write. I did appreciate what you said about mine, like a well-written lullaby, I was really pleased when you said that because that is exactly what I was trying to achieve.
You really throw the punches with words; reading your poetry is like being in a boxing ring, we have to duck for cover, it is so powerful...
posted by
marieclaire66
on October 12, 2006 at 1:46 PM
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Hi Troosha
Yep this Nation is proud of the fact, the daily Tabloid tells, us Brits work the most in unpaid hours in europe. Pay the most in taxes, and no one seems, if they care or notice, to busy rushing about keeping up with the Joneses, now some councils are talking about banning Christmas holidays, saying it offends people of different faiths. My ase it does! It just means if you want Christmas day off, don't expect to get paid for it, in other words no more bank holidays or time spent round the table with your children. Please excuse my rant, friend. Mike
posted by
lionladroar
on October 12, 2006 at 1:43 PM
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Yikes
Certainly a reminder of how we seem to run ragged (and run in circles) missing the most important mark - family. Sometimes not entirely by choice, kids, mothers, brothers, and sisters become disengaged and it's a sad truth. Strong statement!
posted by
Troosha
on October 12, 2006 at 1:09 PM
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