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marie-claire
thanx for the honesty... If i please you, then i know my poems are becoming better
posted by
coolacen
on July 28, 2006 at 12:48 PM
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some very original ideas! well done!
It’s the Jungle affect.
It’s something I’ll never reject.
I sense a piety place.
My woman I embrace.
I seriously love this place.
It’s the jungle affect
I like the unusual images, it is powerful and it works, may I add one little complaint, some lines seem to rhyme for the sake of it, they seem a little forced, contrived, but I did notice a general improvement overtime, it is really starting to flow. As they say practice makes perfect.
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marieclaire66
on July 27, 2006 at 12:40 AM
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