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IS THERE RACE IN LOVE BETWEEN TWO I THINK THEY HAVE TO BE TWO IN ONE
BUT I LOVE HOW YOU DESCRIBED THE HIGH WAY MUST YOU MENT THE LIFE
posted by
NAJWA
on July 7, 2006 at 6:54 AM
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is it a song?
i can hear music?
Jo
posted by
brisbane_artist
on July 7, 2006 at 4:05 AM
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I love it! Your poetry is coming to life!
You are not just describing you are showing your enthusiasm for the race is coming throught very well! the gearing it up repetition is effective, also there is a positive message, you urge people to join in to win too. There are still the odd awkward verse that's just there for the sake of rhyming, but really the overall effect is not lost but holds together well. Wonderful! this one is flowing well you know. Keep racing! (but drive carefully).
posted by
marieclaire66
on July 6, 2006 at 4:21 PM
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