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I like the simplicity of that closing - just do it, a baby will be good for him. :-)

 

posted by markng on May 26, 2006 at 5:58 AM | link to this | reply

ms vision
Sometimes the most simple interactions are the most powerful bits of fiction. Good writing.

posted by avant-garde on May 26, 2006 at 3:18 AM | link to this | reply

One of my favorite things to do,
eat an icecream cone.  This was a great little piece

posted by Flumpystalls3000 on May 25, 2006 at 5:01 PM | link to this | reply

I like this a lot. I see a bigger piece coming out of this!

posted by brettnik on May 25, 2006 at 12:59 PM | link to this | reply

This is different. Seperate stories like people sitting sperately while they eat. A first, I didn' get into it but I re-read it again and I like it. Maybe a few more scenes and then maybe tie it all together or set the scene up. Not a story...not a movie...somewhere inbetween.

posted by ThomasFranklin on May 25, 2006 at 12:20 PM | link to this | reply

MsVision.....Nice images here with the ice cream, especially....
Great little vignettes that knit a story together...Enjoyable.

posted by MedusaNextDoor on May 25, 2006 at 12:01 PM | link to this | reply

nice stuff...
...I love immediate fiction...a scene thjat tells a story...like watching people on a bus flash by...or people in a bus stop shelter, kissing, in the rain...at night..and you flash by in your car...wee stories are everywhere...immediate fiction...

posted by FranklyMydear1 on May 25, 2006 at 7:00 AM | link to this | reply

Pink was always my favorite as a child!

posted by Original_Influence on May 25, 2006 at 5:15 AM | link to this | reply

Now I want some Ice Cream

posted by bel_1965 on May 25, 2006 at 5:10 AM | link to this | reply