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Hi MsVision - I think I'll need to go back and catch up on some of the
earlier instalments....
posted by
littlemspickles
on May 13, 2006 at 1:52 PM
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Rising Heat
I dont usually read fiction but this was very good I will come back to read more
posted by
Kat02
on May 13, 2006 at 8:08 AM
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pretty intresting
~Silly
posted by
SillySoul88
on May 9, 2006 at 4:37 PM
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Nice banter in the dialogue...wish I had read the first 14 first, tho
posted by
brettnik
on May 9, 2006 at 12:22 PM
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Well, that Frances doesn't
know when to quit! I love this story, it's so fun to read. Take care
posted by
Flumpystalls3000
on May 8, 2006 at 4:57 PM
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MsVision
I did read it all the way to the end and I enjoyed it very much. I don't usually edit other people's works but since you intend to publish, I might point out/question one thing. Is it proper to say "on queue" or should it be "on cue"?
posted by
TAPS.
on May 7, 2006 at 10:58 PM
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Counterfeit 100 dollar bills.
Dear MsVision.. Your chapter here is a very good example of 'dodgy transactions'. Yes, one should always be careful with fake big notes. While I was in San Francisco, USA, I treated my small cousins to Burger King. I paid a hundred dollar bill and the sales clerk said: 'NO! I cannot take that bill, I have to call the supervisor. She gave it back to me and called the supervisor. I asked why? - The supervisor said that the young cashiers were told not to accept 100 dollar bills cause they cannot identify the fake ones. I was given change. I went back to our seat. I counted and it was more than 20 dollars. I called the supervisor and returned it. She was thankful, I told them I stll cannot comprehend why they are so scared of the 100 dollar bills. Anyway he new money of Australia now is very hard to fake because of the clear plastic like thing.
thanks for you visit. I am not very active with Blogit now because I am writing short stories for possible publication and I am very busy with other things, but I will be back. I also check if I have new comments and answer them.
regards for now. Prof
posted by
PROF-SUMAKEL33
on May 7, 2006 at 2:29 AM
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Ms Vision
Good writing, and I mean that sincerely.
posted by
avant-garde
on May 7, 2006 at 1:01 AM
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I'm amazed at the wideness of your imagination
posted by
Straightforward
on May 6, 2006 at 6:30 PM
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MsVision,
I've started at the end, but I get the impression that Frances just got what was coming to her? There was some meaning there, wasn't there, when Miranda stumbled onto the pedometer and decided not to pick it up because she had her focus and motivation back?
It sounds like she's on to bigger and better things.
posted by
Blanche.
on May 6, 2006 at 5:44 PM
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I liked the counterfiet scene. Personally, I'm offended when my 20 dollars gets marked with that counterfiet pen red/yellow. I'm not a counterfiet and I doubt that the federal reserve is paying them to check their money. My own personall gripe.
posted by
ThomasFranklin
on May 6, 2006 at 5:14 PM
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I Will Return to Read The Others
It seems to be good writing and interesting to me. I am not an expert on evaluating writing. I am a math person and it is easy to evaluate.
posted by
Dr_JPT
on May 6, 2006 at 12:34 PM
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This is the longest post I have ever written
so if you made it all the way through to the end I thank you, for making the effort and not losing patience. The third story (or at least the first draft of) Miranda's Sweet adventures are penned. I welcome your constructive feedback as I hope to publish them as a set one day, in a non blog format.
posted by
MsVision
on May 6, 2006 at 6:43 AM
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