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Nice poem!
We need his help or what would become of us. I liked this one very much. Nice work!
Take care,
Blipps
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blipps
on April 21, 2006 at 9:37 PM
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Cool, since you asked for my feedback
there's precious little about you in your profile -- so I can only assume your writing style is pure and natural, and you haven't had a lot of classroom training. Your strength is in the meter, in the beat, and you have an eye for rhyme. If I were your mentor, I'd suggest you keep writing, keep going, and along the way get some objective training from a teacher who knows poetry and grammar. In a wink of time you'll be seeing your ideas blooming on the pages of literary magazines... :)pat_b
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Pat_B
on April 21, 2006 at 8:36 AM
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