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a good subject for poetry. I think you could play with the last line as it is a bit conversational. Very good message. Keep it coming.

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posted by MsVision on February 24, 2006 at 8:52 PM | link to this | reply

posted by dejtemper on February 24, 2006 at 8:51 PM | link to this | reply

That's actually a pretty good point...

cool poem, too.

 

A mulatto
An albino
A mosquito
My libido

posted by Mademoiselle on February 24, 2006 at 8:49 PM | link to this | reply