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His addiction is pain and excitment.
posted by
ThomasFranklin
on May 1, 2006 at 5:06 PM
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Thanks Rhiannon.
posted by
word.smith
on December 5, 2005 at 10:27 AM
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This one and the one about the woman on the bus
when the robbery occur both show the technique of associating the reader in. Good job!
posted by
Rhiannon1
on December 2, 2005 at 8:55 PM
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Thanks for reading, Aria.
posted by
word.smith
on December 2, 2005 at 4:56 AM
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Word-This is an entertaining story.
posted by
Aria4
on December 1, 2005 at 6:57 PM
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Blanche,
Thanks for reading. The world is made up strange folks.
posted by
word.smith
on November 23, 2005 at 6:27 AM
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Word.smith,
I was a little slow catching on to who the narrator was at first. I even thought it could be a dog, but by the third graph or so, I caught on that this was a philandering guy caught in a lover's closet. I think you did a really good job of taking a man's perspective, especially a not-especially likable one, and see what makes him tick.
posted by
Blanche.
on November 22, 2005 at 5:53 PM
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JW,
I'm not sure what you wanted to say, but thanks for stopping in!
posted by
word.smith
on November 22, 2005 at 9:16 AM
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Oh, I can'
posted by
SomeoneElse
on November 22, 2005 at 6:32 AM
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I know what you mean, AJ.
Some of us just like to live on the edge - until we fall of, that is.
posted by
word.smith
on November 16, 2005 at 5:54 PM
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Correction...
"women" instead of "woman"
posted by
Ainsley_Jo_Phillips
on November 15, 2005 at 2:07 PM
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Sounds like a really "mature" guy who is, perhaps, a...
...closet daredevil or something.
The woman sound as if they might be the same way.
They're all playing with lighted TNT in my book
Ciao!
AJ
posted by
Ainsley_Jo_Phillips
on November 15, 2005 at 2:06 PM
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Thanks Factor,
I had to snip and snip to keep it down and even then!
posted by
word.smith
on November 14, 2005 at 4:59 AM
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Thanks, Novel....
I think Masky's link is working. I'll check it again. Your analysis of this story is right on the mark. I'll be round to read all the stories soon. I've been busy doing nothing over this past weekend.
posted by
word.smith
on November 14, 2005 at 4:58 AM
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Hi word!
I enjoyed your story. You went over the wordcount though didn't you!? If you had not posted it at the end I would not have known though because it was very easy to read. I mean easy as in enjoyable. Very nice.
posted by
FactorFiction
on November 13, 2005 at 8:30 AM
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Enjoyed your story, Word.
And I thought it was funny. At first I was not sure of the protagonist's motivation, but by midstory, the man's self-destructiveness could be seen as inevitable so he seems to have the attitude: If you're that far gone, you might as well keep on going. So the premise is he just can't help himself. This could be a good premise for a series of his misadventures. And I can see a bevy of middle-aged women tired of their husbands vying (sp) for his attentions because the word is that he is SO exciting. Maybe even "European." The man has high drama need. btw: is the link to Masky's story working ok? --novel
posted by
Novelvision2020
on November 12, 2005 at 11:55 AM
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Lensman...
Hadn't thought about them. Maybe the next story ought to be how to fix their business. Thanks for stopping by. This reminds me that I have unfinished business in your blog.
posted by
word.smith
on November 11, 2005 at 7:30 PM
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Word.Smith
Now, what are we going to do about those cheating wives who keep getting these poor innocent fellas in all this trouble?
posted by
Lensman
on November 11, 2005 at 7:25 PM
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Thanks very much for reading bright.
He does need to get a life!
posted by
word.smith
on November 11, 2005 at 7:20 PM
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word.smith
This is really written well and flows right along with the story. It is easy to read and understand. This guy needs to find a different source for excitement. Great Read! 
posted by
BrightIrish
on November 11, 2005 at 6:51 PM
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Jacenta, thanks for reading and commenting....
I've never understood people who live like that....it is dangerous living.
posted by
word.smith
on November 11, 2005 at 7:29 AM
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Reni, thanks...
Maybe
are the only things that squeak in terror?
posted by
word.smith
on November 11, 2005 at 7:28 AM
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word.smith,
You are definitely a talented writer. Your writing style was easy to follow, clear and understandable. It is rather neat that you were able to write so well, doing it from a man's point of view.
He really is walking on the edge, isn't he?
posted by
jacentaOld
on November 10, 2005 at 7:57 PM
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Hmmmm...Writing as a man, huh? Well done! Although
I can't help but wonder how many people "squeak in terror". lol
posted by
Renigade
on November 10, 2005 at 7:37 PM
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Masky,
Thanks! I had fun with this. Some of it is factual. I think my friend might have been clued in on Sunday when I was questioning him about his experience with those dogs, 
since I'd heard the story before. All characters should come alive like this one. Writing would be fun and easy all the time.
posted by
word.smith
on November 10, 2005 at 6:34 PM
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clearlyperceived,
Thanks for reading, I'm glad you enjoyed this read.
posted by
word.smith
on November 10, 2005 at 6:26 PM
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Strat,
Thanks for that reality check. You're right. For many men, this is natural behaviour. Besides none of them I know admit they have 'issues', neither do they wax lyrical. 
posted by
word.smith
on November 10, 2005 at 6:25 PM
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Telly, thanks for reading.
I was going for humor too. It's funny that although I giggled too as I wrote it, I wasn't quite sure it was funny. You know how sometimes what you think is funny drops like a stone with someone else? My husband said it was, but he's biased.
posted by
word.smith
on November 10, 2005 at 6:21 PM
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Thanks Medusa,
I've always wanted to do that. I mean write a story from a man's perspective. I have all this information from having some male friends, I thought I'd try this now. I wanted to get some feedback on whether it was convicing, hence my shameless advertising.
posted by
word.smith
on November 10, 2005 at 6:18 PM
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Word...WOW!!!!!!!!! That is so cool you wrote from a man's perspective.
This is excellent. This is full of action and the characters are simple and well described. This is just EXCELLENT! I dont' want to quit reading about this guy. For some reason, I want to know if he's gonna get away with it again. Excellent!
posted by
Masky
on November 10, 2005 at 2:12 PM
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LOL...ROFL
I certainly enjoy the realism, real or not I won't ask. And don't tell me. Very nice piece of decriptive writing.
posted by
clearlyperceived
on November 10, 2005 at 11:27 AM
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Very well done, Word!
The thing is, we all have friends just like this guy.
The only thing I would look at again is his interior monologue. I don't know many guys who talk about "dealing wiht my own issues" or describe a zesty session as "molten passion" -- although that's a terrific description, in fact!
But wow! All in all, a truly terrific read! Thanks!
posted by
strat
on November 10, 2005 at 11:07 AM
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I liked this. Your nameless narrator looking back at his life of forbidden flings is quite a fellow. You could expand this, you know, and somehow, the idea of him getting a bit of what-for for messing about had me giggling a time or two. Especially with the dogs.
posted by
telynor
on November 10, 2005 at 8:45 AM
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Hi word.smith.......I enjoyed this.....
and it flowed smoothly. I am just intrigued you wrote it from a man's perspective. Since you are a woman, it threw me off for a few moments. But then again, it shouldn't matter what a writer's sex is as long as the story is good. So good for you.
posted by
MedusaNextDoor
on November 10, 2005 at 7:24 AM
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Avant,
I wouldn't expect you to. What is unfortunate is that I actually know people (thankfully few!) who behave like this.
posted by
word.smith
on November 9, 2005 at 8:27 PM
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word.smith
Although well written, it is hard for me to comment positively on this destructive behavior.
posted by
avant-garde
on November 9, 2005 at 2:34 PM
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Straight,
It isn't acceptable behaviour, but unfortunately there are people who live like this.
posted by
word.smith
on November 9, 2005 at 1:11 PM
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Good to understand this psychology though i can't accept it!
posted by
Straightforward
on November 9, 2005 at 1:02 PM
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