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Glad I could help! :-)
posted by
roofpig
on February 22, 2005 at 8:39 AM
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Yes dear, no worries!!! Love your dialogues!! VOYAGER9940
posted by
Voyager9940
on February 22, 2005 at 8:32 AM
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Roof
I totally 100% agree with you...I deleted the last line and feel much better about it...now it's a more solid read...many thanks!!!
posted by
MiaElla
on February 22, 2005 at 8:26 AM
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Voyager
Glad to see you are still reading...
posted by
MiaElla
on February 22, 2005 at 8:25 AM
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I likes, I likes.
My only suggestion would be to strip away that very last sentence. I think ending it on the smiles would be more effective. But that's just one man's opinion! :-)
posted by
roofpig
on February 22, 2005 at 8:18 AM
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Oh dear , I have been missing those, I was three chapters behind already, so I'm glad I could catch up now! Good job again there, I enjoy it!! Seeyou around!! VOYAGER9940
posted by
Voyager9940
on February 22, 2005 at 8:17 AM
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