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Thanks for the advice
I have to admit you are right about the beginning. Thanks.
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Dee2206
on March 27, 2007 at 5:18 AM
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1st Half of Chapter One
You have the beginnings of an interesting romance story here! I would suggest beginning the tale with her arriving at her friends house because stories begin in the middle of something. Everything up to that point is the, 'history' for the visit and then you relay it all again in the actual action of the story. You show it just fine, so the beginning becomes redundant. Keep writing!
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FoliageGold
on March 26, 2007 at 8:12 AM
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