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I agree with Klara, UH, I think it's an excelllent piece. I would suggest that you re-write the first paragraph to more clearly state your thesis and the last paragraph to re-state it. As far as the content and the ideas, my experience about respect between genders is that things have gotten too abstract. I get irritated with my boyfriend, but if the love is the focus, then I accept our differences as strengths. If I focus on the irritation, then the love gets lost. Maybe as a society, we need to focus on survival more and feelings less. Just a thought.
posted by
Blanche.
on December 13, 2004 at 2:26 PM
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I so agree with you on almost everything....
I married into a family where the "male" is the dominant factor in everything! Sucks.
posted by
Original_Influence
on December 12, 2004 at 6:59 PM
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I totally agree with your last sentence.
posted by
Original_Influence
on December 12, 2004 at 6:48 PM
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A very interesting blog.
Glad to have read this.
Ann
posted by
A-and-B
on December 12, 2004 at 1:18 PM
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And anytime you have a question you want answered, just ask, UH!
You are a brave soul, and one of my favorites on here, if not THE favorite. I answer emails too, although it takes a day or two, as I get about 4000 a day with the business and all. Keep it up. You'll do well, and don't get discouraged. The first piece I sold, I sent it to about 1000 publishers before anyone published it!!
posted by
KlaraRoberts
on December 12, 2004 at 1:13 PM
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Klara
Your suggestions are MORE than welcome and I'm happy to receive them. Thank you thank you thank you =)
posted by
Unidentified_Hacker
on December 12, 2004 at 1:10 PM
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Excellent, excellent work UH!!! Bravo. I am glad to see someone take
action instead of just talking about writing. Can I make one small suggestion? Lose the last sentence. The one before it was in my opinion, a stronger, more effective ending. Also, change "believes" in the second last line to "beliefs". Hope you don't mind my suggestions, if you do, just tell me to back off. But it did my soul good to see you take this step. Not everyone has the courage to do so!!!!
posted by
KlaraRoberts
on December 12, 2004 at 1:05 PM
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