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Re: Rumor
Thank you, me too
posted by
lionreign
on April 8, 2013 at 2:59 AM
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Re: calia14
I like to write empathy pieces from time to time... maybe the next one will be more perky
posted by
lionreign
on April 8, 2013 at 2:55 AM
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Re: jfm32
To be honest I agree with you in parts - I think the last 4 lines feel a little clumsy and the rhythm is disturbed there but after several hours of tweaking I have gotten nowhere so I opted to leave it until I reach it for a rewrite
posted by
lionreign
on April 8, 2013 at 2:53 AM
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Re: lovelyladymonk
It's a difficult fear to face because it's often formed by experience and yet without facing it we remain crippled by it
posted by
lionreign
on April 8, 2013 at 2:49 AM
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Re: 2Philomena
Yes it does
posted by
lionreign
on April 8, 2013 at 2:48 AM
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Re: Sam444
Absolutely, it is a chain that we can only break for ourselves and one that cripples us at the worst times if we allow it
posted by
lionreign
on April 8, 2013 at 2:44 AM
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Re: Annicita
For most of us it's intimidating but not too bad but I think for the genuinely shy it can be an impossible hurdle
posted by
lionreign
on April 8, 2013 at 2:38 AM
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Re: Kabu
Gosh yes, shyness is such a disavantage when seeking happiness
posted by
lionreign
on April 8, 2013 at 2:35 AM
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Re: C_C_T
I know... as soon as one side starts to imagine what the other is thinking things go horribly wrong
posted by
lionreign
on April 8, 2013 at 2:32 AM
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Re: TAPS
We like to pretend we're big and brave but it's all a con really 
posted by
lionreign
on April 8, 2013 at 2:31 AM
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Re: FormerStudentIntern
Too true, it's vital that you do it though
posted by
lionreign
on April 8, 2013 at 2:22 AM
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Re: BC-A
True, but often the weakling needs to find the courage to speak first
posted by
lionreign
on April 8, 2013 at 2:16 AM
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lion...the poem reads just fine to me....
Been there as the "shy boy" when I was younger..
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posted by
Rumor
on April 7, 2013 at 7:55 AM
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That was so sad.
posted by
calia14
on April 6, 2013 at 6:34 PM
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just re-read again, and take what I said back. Maybe i just wanted to be upliffted.
posted by
jfm32
on April 6, 2013 at 2:48 PM
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I like the idea of the poem, but the rhyming just doesn't work, but it could. Couple your ideas with the rhyme of your thought. Here, the rhythm is everything, go with it , and don't breach it with outer thoughts,
posted by
jfm32
on April 6, 2013 at 1:29 PM
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I've gone through this more times than I could count, my friend. This just breaks my heart and makes me cry.
posted by
lovelyladymonk
on April 6, 2013 at 12:12 PM
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Shy Boy
Fear destroys everything.
posted by
2Philomena
on April 6, 2013 at 4:19 AM
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I could envision it all! Sometimes fear of what might happen can sap one of the necessary courage! sam
posted by
sam444
on April 5, 2013 at 8:17 PM
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why is it so hard to take the first step? I have done that before...a bit intimidating if you haven't done before but I did it first at a dare....and i was the one who spoke first between me and my hubby
posted by
Annicita
on April 5, 2013 at 7:12 PM
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what a shame they may have missed the love of their life...
great work luv.
posted by
Kabu
on April 5, 2013 at 4:51 PM
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Oh dear Lion and what you think she is thinking. Probably very unnerving for the young lady, she dare not show encouragement, one would not want to think that she was brazen.
posted by
C_C_T
on April 5, 2013 at 11:12 AM
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Great!
Four sons and nine grandsons have surely helped me to see that trait in the male species.
posted by
TAPS.
on April 5, 2013 at 9:37 AM
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It can be tough to get those words out.
posted by
FormerStudentIntern
on April 5, 2013 at 6:06 AM
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lionreign
YSometimes to love is to identify with the 90 pound weakling. BC-A, Bill’s R®st
posted by
BC-A
on April 5, 2013 at 5:01 AM
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