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Addressed to Darson
Or, better still, read horizon as: sky meeting the earth, to keep the sense in proper perspective.
posted by
anib
on February 13, 2010 at 11:53 PM
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Darson
Hmmm .... Charles Dickens and Aba, that is what I call the horizon, the earth meeting the sky (he's my fave too). Yet, I am honored. Thank you Darson. Your encouragements never fail to delight me
posted by
anib
on February 13, 2010 at 11:41 PM
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elysianfields
The Greek mythology encompass a very wide range of feelings; they take you to the highest of the high and also to the lowest of the low leaving one dazzled with the experience. Their main aim being 'catharsis', medicinal. Also, that's why its perennial appeal. That all of you found it a good effort is a cause of great satisfaction for me. When I started, I doubted whether I will be able to do proper justice. All you greats assure me that I did. Thank you so much
~Aba.
posted by
anib
on February 13, 2010 at 8:17 PM
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I am, as always, absorbing your writings. I do that with Charles Dickens often...it's got such depth, you just have to read each line twice or more. Nice...
posted by
Darson
on February 13, 2010 at 6:45 PM
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posted by
elysianfields
on February 13, 2010 at 2:33 PM
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sam
You sure are a motivator. The idea just crossed my mind that I try a Hellenic poetry form and let's see how much I can compress. The actual story, as you say, runs in a good number of pages and at times gets mixed up to complicate matters. So I did have to concentrate to bring out the sequence in such a way that at no point it murdered the intent of the story element, and it was well worth the effort."It needed to flow and it also needed to lead", that's perfectly said. I am happy that a poet of your stature should find my new venture not so 'raw' i think. With your accreditation, my satisfaction is even the more. Thank you so very much.
posted by
anib
on February 13, 2010 at 5:22 AM
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I thought that was a great exercise in poetic form of taking a long story and placing it into a poetic state for one can capture the essence but allow the reader the freedom to expand and offer their thoughts! I liked the rhyme, but I truly thought it flowed with a cadence that befit the story line as it were! It needed to flow but it needed to lead as well. You have accomplished both! The reason I say this is that it keeps the reader engaged. Themes of this nature are difficult to put in verse for they require a great deal of attention to placement! One word in the wrong place and it distorts and or changes the intent! Safe to say, the goal was met and it turned out rather nice as well! I thin this poem deserves more than one read to capture it total essence! It was a fantastic effort! sam
posted by
sam444
on February 12, 2010 at 10:38 PM
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shobana
Refreshing to see you on a Valentine weekend Day. You have understood the intensity of their love so well, Shobs. You yourself being always so loving
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posted by
anib
on February 12, 2010 at 9:30 PM
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TAPS
Well, that was a real good one "nymphs swarming in Orpheus' orifice". Think that should be the actual title to the story Hahahaha
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posted by
anib
on February 12, 2010 at 9:28 PM
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Kabu
Thank you Kabu, this, for me was an exercise of making a long story short, but still I think I could touch all the points. Ths Sisyphus' stone and Ixion tied to feathered wheel are all man's story, although they are beings of the underworld, Hades. But there are times when we humans dwell in hell on earth.
posted by
anib
on February 12, 2010 at 9:26 PM
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You've brought out the intensity of their love so well abanerjee. Great Job. Happy Valentine's Day to you and yours.Have a lovely time.
posted by
shobana
on February 12, 2010 at 8:24 PM
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For some reason, I'm having visions of nymphs swarming in Orpheus' orifice.
posted by
TAPS.
on February 12, 2010 at 1:00 PM
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Sigh....fabulous and such a story and way to read it.
posted by
Kabu
on February 12, 2010 at 10:34 AM
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