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Layers and layers ...
... of fear ... you write with pain as the core of life ... I believe it's light deep under, and safety, and love but ... when will it be reached ... - 
- genio
posted by
ggXpress
on December 17, 2008 at 1:14 PM
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A hard read and probably a harder write. Chilling vision of violence and not to be be able to do anything about it.
posted by
jfm32
on December 16, 2008 at 6:27 PM
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Wow.
posted by
adnohr
on December 16, 2008 at 5:36 PM
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Whoa! Touch so many planes you let real be real, even this proves insight
posted by
Mystereo
on December 16, 2008 at 9:19 AM
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Highly touching and painful ....
posted by
afzal50
on December 16, 2008 at 4:24 AM
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Your poem sent shivers down my spine! Brilliant!
posted by
elinjo
on December 16, 2008 at 2:37 AM
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That was beautifully written yet so heartbreaking
posted by
GALACTUS_
on December 15, 2008 at 11:05 PM
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jen can't even imagine. baby don't what to say .Inspired me with your poems. please rhea81256@aol.com
posted by
muley12
on December 15, 2008 at 10:46 PM
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jen can't even imagine. baby don't what to say .Inspired me with your poems. please rhea81256@aol.com
posted by
muley12
on December 15, 2008 at 10:46 PM
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Your words are so striking and I can feel the pain. Great job.
posted by
Brickhouse
on December 15, 2008 at 6:35 PM
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I can feel it....
posted by
Star5_
on December 15, 2008 at 5:00 PM
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Oh Jen... that is so sad... and even sadder that it does happen fairly often. Your poem is so real ... as if had been there , witnessing the tragedy... Your empathy is touching and your words brilliantly depict the terror of the scene. Great work!
posted by
Sinome
on December 15, 2008 at 3:22 PM
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Sad and poignant
And unfortunately a scene that is enacted and re-enacted with terrible frequency.
Geraldine
posted by
pernesegirl1
on December 15, 2008 at 3:01 PM
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Heartbreaking...so many little innocent children go through
so much hell...It tears me apart.
posted by
hazel_st_cricket
on December 15, 2008 at 7:16 AM
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Heartbreaking and powerful!
posted by
Katray2
on December 15, 2008 at 7:04 AM
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Oh wow! This is so powerful.
posted by
Rockingrector_retd
on December 15, 2008 at 4:37 AM
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Very heart wrenching...Wow Jen this is just wonderful!
posted by
Wigopa_
on December 14, 2008 at 10:32 PM
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Very Powerful and excellent expression
Remember Love and fear cannot exist in the same moment and if you are in a love moment, fear cannot find you.
posted by
skye08
on December 14, 2008 at 9:10 PM
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