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Yeah...sex changes you. You can never go back; you lose a part of yourself, not just innocence, but a degree of free will, because lust is such a potent force... And he knew what was happening, what he would be giving up, and he let it happen anyway. That's what makes the first experience so intense. And the man-child was, of course, a virgin... Orgasm and intense pain look so similar, and it's called "the little death". Ancient religions once believed that the only way a man could commune with heaven was through woman, at the moment of orgasm....
posted by
CharlieMine
on June 9, 2008 at 7:29 PM
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...there was some pain there...and loss of essence...when he grabbed the man child's root....moon 
posted by
magic_moon
on June 9, 2008 at 6:36 PM
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wow crazy wild ride i never felt a poem like that before
nice
posted by
mysteria
on June 9, 2008 at 2:37 PM
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Yeah, and in this poem, Adam's rage is directed at the man-child...sins of the fathers repeated... I thought this up on a long car ride, couldn't wait to get home and write it down, can't believe I got it right... But I love it! Is that narcissistic? :)
posted by
CharlieMine
on June 9, 2008 at 12:42 PM
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Poor Eve, Adam gets off looking so good. They were both duped by their mortality! They each got their just punishment. sam
posted by
sam444
on June 9, 2008 at 11:18 AM
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Re: Adam and Eve ...
You got it! This is my best poem, in my humble and uneducated opinion. <grin> I love the image of Adam glaring out through Eve's eyes; the man-child seeing this, and choosing to go on, knowing what the consequences will be: eternal subjugation to his own desires....
Thanks for your comment!
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CharlieMine
on June 8, 2008 at 9:02 PM
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Adam and Eve ...
the first romance and film noir with Eve as the femme fatale. In other words, she causes mankind's downfall. A message from history ... Excellent!
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BC-A
on June 8, 2008 at 6:43 PM
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