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posted by Soulofapoet on December 4, 2007 at 9:52 AM | link to this | reply

straight forward, that's so cool

posted by star4sky5 on September 4, 2007 at 8:55 AM | link to this | reply

A thought to your wish;

If one was to believe that God is the love and life in, through and around all living things (this is just an if), couldn't one see, hear, smell, taste and touch everything through God? Just a thought! ~Blessings~

posted by roadscross on August 31, 2007 at 1:33 PM | link to this | reply

I think this is a very nice poem....

posted by Offy on August 31, 2007 at 11:53 AM | link to this | reply

Well expressed and flowing

posted by PoetRaye on August 23, 2007 at 9:13 PM | link to this | reply

i wouldnt know how to critic poetry, but i can tell you i liked this poem

very much

posted by callista on August 23, 2007 at 9:04 PM | link to this | reply

A few comments as per your request in The Blogit Town Square

1.  Touching people seems not to fit with the other "so I could"s.

2. "not the coffee" need not be parenthetical.  Indeed, placing them within parenthesis makes the phrase stand out more than it would if simply set off with commas.

3.  The last lines are not convincing.  Perhaps, if you brought in something along the lines of dreaming the dreams of all...

Carl Peter

posted by cpklapper on August 19, 2007 at 2:46 PM | link to this | reply

Ah yes...

To experience life as others might, what would be the one common experience?

posted by food4thought on August 15, 2007 at 8:19 PM | link to this | reply

Straightforward - This is lovely!

posted by FoliageGold on August 15, 2007 at 6:22 AM | link to this | reply

Nice work

I know the feeling, the desire to experience something the same way another does. Good poem on the topic

posted by NightMajik on August 13, 2007 at 7:29 AM | link to this | reply

All our tomorrows are ours to create.....

great piece, thank you

posted by mariaki on August 13, 2007 at 4:35 AM | link to this | reply

Cool.. a glimpse of heaven perhaps? ~Peace, OTA

posted by OTA. on August 13, 2007 at 3:24 AM | link to this | reply

Hi - an admirable attempt to break through the barriers of just being us.

Imagine how it would feel, though, if for one day we were able to experience how someone else thinks and feels, but still be us. We would probably hate it at first!!

posted by Antonionioni on August 12, 2007 at 2:37 AM | link to this | reply

We have to live to see a better tomorrow .

posted by afzal50 on August 11, 2007 at 5:51 PM | link to this | reply

Love this poem

posted by Sheilah on August 11, 2007 at 10:56 AM | link to this | reply