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Okay, after lunch for you then
Daylight Savings is over for us here, it's 8:45pm. So that works out better for me!

posted by Discombobulated78 on April 29, 2007 at 1:47 AM | link to this | reply

But you are. I'll give you tomatoes when we chat. It's 2.10 here
Must ne 9.40 there. Half an hour, after Ive had lunch?

posted by Bhaskar.ing on April 29, 2007 at 1:39 AM | link to this | reply

Thanks but I'm not that great
I think I'm just good enough to post on Blogit and not be pelted with virtual tomatoes :). And if you're going to be around tonight we should try for a real chat for once!

posted by Discombobulated78 on April 29, 2007 at 1:34 AM | link to this | reply

Thanks but I'm not that great
I think I'm just good enough to post on Blogit and not be pelted with virtual tomatoes :). And if you're going to be around tonight we should try for a real chat for once!

posted by Discombobulated78 on April 29, 2007 at 1:34 AM | link to this | reply

Yes Tony the great. So do I take from you too. 2day I feel like discoing

posted by Bhaskar.ing on April 29, 2007 at 1:32 AM | link to this | reply

oH, now to disco 'coz i've been able to pull you in.
I'm just a first grader in poetry. No doubt, you bunch of poets are really, really great. And that cerainly is what I'm not.

posted by Bhaskar.ing on April 29, 2007 at 1:30 AM | link to this | reply

I notice you wrote a sonnet, have you been taking lessons from Tony? :P

posted by Discombobulated78 on April 29, 2007 at 1:28 AM | link to this | reply

So my Fate Disco seems to have smiled on me. Makes me 'appy

posted by Bhaskar.ing on April 29, 2007 at 1:27 AM | link to this | reply

You say it's not your calling but you're better than me!
Bravo! That really pulled me in, which doesn't happen all that often.

posted by Discombobulated78 on April 29, 2007 at 1:11 AM | link to this | reply

Okay then, but I'll use a lot of tyour space

To make a start more swift than weighty,

Hail Muse. Dear Reader,

Here’s a sonnet without a moral

I hope the reader will not quarrel

About a minor missing link

But if he likes it, he can think.

Memoir of an Apostate

How wonderful it is, upon waking,

To find one’s lover at one’s side;

The slow delicate light is breaking

Irresolutely through the wide

Grey windows of our bedroom, falling

On my beloved’s hair, and my recalling

How last night she undid it, how

It flowed between my hands; but now

She lies asleep, unswiftly breathing;

Her thoughts are not with me, her dreams

Traverse the solitary streams

Of inward lands, yet her hair, wreathing

The pillows in a mesh of light,

Returns to me the fugitive night.

And so I’ll end the story here.

What it’s come to is still not clear.

Whether the fates will smile or frown,

Make poor Bhaskar survive or drown,

But if raising, or even falling,

Poetry’s truly, not my calling.

posted by Bhaskar.ing on April 29, 2007 at 1:00 AM | link to this | reply

Thanks Bhas, I'd love to see you write some poetry!

posted by Discombobulated78 on April 29, 2007 at 12:51 AM | link to this | reply

Discom- This is just too beautiful.You bring out the latent poet in me

posted by Bhaskar.ing on April 28, 2007 at 10:53 PM | link to this | reply

Discombulated
This was lovely!  --Joy!Mary 

posted by FoliageGold on April 28, 2007 at 2:16 PM | link to this | reply

Thanks all :)

posted by Discombobulated78 on April 28, 2007 at 2:14 PM | link to this | reply

Great work!

posted by teddypoet_TheGoodByeFade on April 27, 2007 at 9:55 PM | link to this | reply

It's a lovely poem.

posted by afzal50 on April 27, 2007 at 6:28 PM | link to this | reply

Disco
I enjoyed this alot.  Not overdone, and from the heart.  Well done.

-samrtdog

posted by smartdog_670 on April 27, 2007 at 5:27 PM | link to this | reply

posted by star4sky5 on April 27, 2007 at 4:58 PM | link to this | reply

To sleep, perchance to dream...nicely done...

posted by scriber on April 27, 2007 at 3:26 PM | link to this | reply