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Simple living can certainly be better and more wholesome than the concrete jungle.
posted by
mariss9
on September 24, 2012 at 6:36 PM
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It's sad to see people living in such fear.
posted by
FormerStudentIntern
on September 22, 2012 at 10:11 AM
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quick edit....delete the apostrophe after mothers....
you can make this into 2 or leave as one...can you do more of a seguey or connecting line or 2 to help transition?
wonderful sentiment in today's society
posted by
Annicita
on September 22, 2012 at 5:22 AM
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I like it - you started out with love and pride, then turned us around to show how different it is today. An abrupt reminder of what we have lost along the way.
posted by
adnohr
on September 22, 2012 at 4:57 AM
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As far as the spelling thing, I am dyslexic, something unheard of back in the dinosaur days when I went to school, and then started drinking at 12. So as you might imagine I missed a few spelling classes. I am improving though, but it's a struggle. When the kids were in school they would ask me the history questions, and their mother would help them with spelling.
posted by
UtahJay
on September 22, 2012 at 1:01 AM
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Your a good man CCT and thank you. I put these thoughts together in an effort to draw a comparison between what we seem to have lost, and what we seem to have morphed into. I wrote it while watching a show on the History Channel tonight called...You guessed it...Yukon Man.
posted by
UtahJay
on September 22, 2012 at 12:54 AM
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Honour was once a sacred requisite , good poem Jay if I had to criticize this poem, Your mind jumps from one situation to the next and you know what you are saying whilst the reader may be still absorbing the former images. I feel this poem could have been made into two. The gentle life of the so called savages. The savage life of the city which you have known so well. I think you have quite a good future you work has improved immensely. If you had Word Or Works you could run through and sort the spellings easily and you can always get a precise meaning if in doubt from the dictionary on board. Most folk put in a dodgy word now and again, I have looked them up in 3or4 dictionaries or at a last resort asked Arthur who knows most things. I probably do it myself aqnd hope no one notices.
posted by
C_C_T
on September 22, 2012 at 12:24 AM
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