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UtahJay

A little boy lying in wait for the monsters, I identify with that.Great 'poetry' Jay

posted by WileyJohn on August 27, 2012 at 11:05 AM | link to this | reply

A haunting poem you got there. You describe the fear felt so well...I myself am fine in the dark but generally always shuts the blinds.

posted by FormerStudentIntern on August 23, 2012 at 9:25 AM | link to this | reply

Those moments of fear must be pretty gruesome for a little boy. You have managed to capture the scenario leading to the fear excellently Utah.

posted by shobana on August 23, 2012 at 5:59 AM | link to this | reply

An awful feeling Jay, one can understand these fears and feel sorry for that poor little boy.

posted by C_C_T on August 22, 2012 at 11:51 PM | link to this | reply

when I was nursing you would be amazed how many times I got a broom and

chased the bad thing out from under the bed and down the corridor. Oh I am not talking the Children's ward not the mental Health section.  All sorts of people are scared at night worse sometimes when someone is very ill. one night when I was sweeping away the scary things, the Dr. came around the corner! Sigh!! 

posted by Kabu on August 22, 2012 at 7:24 PM | link to this | reply

downtown is one word....who is old green eyes?   an older sister?  great job btw

posted by Annicita on August 22, 2012 at 7:19 PM | link to this | reply

I used to be an "under the bed checker" myself - a little spooked by the falling of night.  Loved this line: To slip into these caramelized realities

posted by Troosha on August 22, 2012 at 6:36 PM | link to this | reply

UJ

Oh this is so incredibly wonderful. I can see the little boy's heart and mind so solidly sure of monsters who are everywhere after dark. Of course you can't tell your dad you're afraid of anything. All this was so clear in the drama of dream, great welcome home.

posted by Justi on August 22, 2012 at 6:19 PM | link to this | reply