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This is great! It took me a while to read back but its truly good and riveting. Write on! xoxoxo
posted by
Sinome
on July 4, 2011 at 6:29 AM
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Just in case I was misunderstood - I mean don't stop the STORY!!
posted by
adnohr
on July 3, 2011 at 6:44 PM
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I agree with Kabu - the flow is better in this version. And, please - don't stop now!!!!!!!!!!
posted by
adnohr
on July 3, 2011 at 6:43 PM
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It does work better darling...going real good
posted by
Kabu
on July 3, 2011 at 6:34 PM
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Don't be confused, Wiley...
When you asked about the rough draft (first version) your questions pointed the way to this revision. I believe the plot thread works a bit better this time, it's less ambiguous... or at least that was my intention.
posted by
Pat_B
on July 3, 2011 at 4:58 PM
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PatB
Great writing but I'm confused again. Is this a story in progress that you have partly written previously and now you have edited?
HAPPY INDEPENDENCE DAY
posted by
WileyJohn
on July 3, 2011 at 12:08 PM
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