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posted by
Annicita
on March 1, 2011 at 9:21 PM
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I'm all for drinking and partying with maryjane, but that can be an opportunity to step out of something to view it very specificly from an altered state of mind..(Lewis Carrol for example--Alice Through the Looking Glass). I got a problem not so much with the sentence structure, but the use of words within it. You seem to be what you are experiencing without stepping out of it.
Now,if I was having what you're having at the same time,I'd be right along with you, but this might not be the case for other readers.
But this could be an interesting,learning experience of how to do a "douple"--like communicating to others in their own form of language while you are actually in another place.
That would be called good writing.
posted by
jfm32
on February 27, 2011 at 11:39 AM
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I feel as though I am in each of the rooms! Great job.
posted by
FormerStudentIntern
on February 27, 2011 at 10:36 AM
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