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R Certainly that’s where you want to be. BC-A, Bill’s RJLst
posted by
BC-A
on July 24, 2010 at 10:48 PM
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Got to confess I approached this one with some intrepidation as another stary-eyed self feature.Really like how you broke open (in song) turning it around. However, "undulating" is never a word you want to use, because no matter where it's place it will stick our as a sore thumb. Though you might want to consider a rewrite, the tone and voice worked for me.
posted by
jfm32
on July 24, 2010 at 10:30 AM
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is this a song?
posted by
Lanetay
on July 24, 2010 at 10:24 AM
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Ooh, I love this. And your commenters are right. It would make
a lovely song, accompanied by a sweet guitar. Especially like the velvet chain imagery.
posted by
Pat_B
on July 24, 2010 at 4:46 AM
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Excellent! I think this would make a great song! It is very rhythmical! sam
posted by
sam444
on July 23, 2010 at 10:43 PM
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Adventurous as ever...very cool indeed, Kris!
posted by
teddypoet_TheGoodByeFade
on July 23, 2010 at 7:17 PM
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