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A touch indeed! BTW, my last poem that you read had a bit of biblical intones to it! sam
posted by
sam444
on May 10, 2010 at 1:20 PM
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To the boy and girl... If only they could let down the guards and truly speak TRUTH! What I find so funny is their conversation is so real and typical. I've found this true in my life. The boy wants to play it off while the girl is trying to understand and pull at threads to understand. If he loves her let it be known. Why does the girl have to be the one to profess it all? What happened to chivalry? I want my men to be men not pansies!
posted by
PinkWeaver
on May 10, 2010 at 12:35 PM
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Re: Re: CC your touch poem seems to have set minds thinking....always a great thing
CORNCRAKE lol Corncrake ...this girl never asked a boy out in her life........why would I?
posted by
Kabu
on May 10, 2010 at 10:57 AM
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The intensity of touch at any point of time determines so many behaviours
between the persons in the future!
posted by
Straightforward
on May 10, 2010 at 12:59 AM
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Re: jfm 32
Thank you for your comments Sir, you are always quite interesting. I did find it difficult to spread what might have be my own emotion across the page. The first poem was written, I don't know, perhaps five years or more ago, I have to read into such, myself and change
slightly; usually. It is just meant to be read and given a slap on the ass. The second was written in desperation yesterday evening as there is nothing worse than a poem forced into being. So it is just instantaneous floundering for little incentives to appear of their own volition. Refreshing after it was finished. Be lucky
posted by
C_C_T
on May 10, 2010 at 12:25 AM
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Re: Shobana
Oh, dear Shobana, writing answers before breakfast and wondering if another cup of coffee would stimulate more witty comments. Another frost, but very light, Sun is shining through my lace curtains, well imagery as yet , but I mean to get some if they still exist. So you see its pretty useless. Thank you for your comments
posted by
C_C_T
on May 9, 2010 at 11:58 PM
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Re: CC your touch poem seems to have set minds thinking....always a great thing
Yes Kabu, but it didn't stop girls asking boys out, did it? You have the answer, but I agree it was a more romantic situation
posted by
C_C_T
on May 9, 2010 at 11:46 PM
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Re: Simone
Thank you Simone your comment is always appreciated
posted by
C_C_T
on May 9, 2010 at 11:43 PM
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Re: CORNCAKE
Bill any time Bill as long as you pay the Bill, Bill.
posted by
C_C_T
on May 9, 2010 at 11:40 PM
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Re: Comment I have to disagree
dsm thank you for your observation. This was probably written under stress. Explain your self boy. By territories it meant within the mind where emotion had taken a turn against that which is called is called love. Not very well explained perhaps but once writes binary nerves or brain cells whatever or organism, one moves into different territory. Sorry I can't explain any differently, I am not intellectual.
posted by
C_C_T
on May 9, 2010 at 11:39 PM
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errata
{ Isn’t this something sir? BC-A, Bill’s RJLst
posted by
BC-A
on May 9, 2010 at 11:10 PM
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CORNCAKE
{ There is light at the end of the cave, and drink and a taxi ride as well. Thanks for the enjoyable ride sir. BC-A, Bill’s RLLst
posted by
BC-A
on May 9, 2010 at 10:49 PM
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Interesting poem and sweet dialogue... Loved both :-) xoxoxo
posted by
Sinome
on May 9, 2010 at 8:56 PM
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CC your touch poem seems to have set minds thinking....always a great thing
to do....The dialogue reminded me of when I was a girl...we really were good girls...taken safely to the door of home.
posted by
Kabu
on May 9, 2010 at 5:03 PM
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Brilliant CC. The dialogue was great too. Thank you for the wishes and visit CC.
posted by
shobana
on May 9, 2010 at 4:04 PM
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Been reading you, but find it a bit difficult to comment because you write so close to the vest. The outer form is so well constructed I wonder about the confluence of images and ideas, and i find myself somehow lost in the outer context, while I'm left with the feeling a moment is only what is has become. Anyway its always refreshing to rub agaist the epemereal, even if I can't remember what happened.
posted by
jfm32
on May 9, 2010 at 3:10 PM
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great I loved the dialogue
posted by
spiderfly
on May 9, 2010 at 1:47 PM
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CORNCRAKE, i have to disagree. love isnt trapped in any dimension, but the organism may have the capacity to block it. Maybe remember, it took another to initiate that first life in the territories.
Territories that have almost closed to sensation,
cannot be opened to continue again.
There is no force or wistfulness that can form
love that is shielded in that closed dimension.
There is no value to a perception, it might
be possible to forget that it had an existence.
posted by
dsm_tchr
on May 9, 2010 at 1:06 PM
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