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I simply am in awe - and especially if you said, this just flowed ~ you go ahead now and 'rap' or rhyme or poem to tome this again --- You're a writer and I am blessed with inspiration each time I read your words --- You know that?
~ You're fresh and with such passion - it's like seeing a brand new day begin again. Elyse
posted by
elysianfields
on January 17, 2010 at 9:22 AM
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Wow!! I am so thankful for these wonderful responses. I wasn't really sure about this, it kind of came out of nowhere. But, I really appreciate all of the feedback and love. Really! Thank you, sooo much.
posted by
PoetikliNclynd
on January 17, 2010 at 9:00 AM
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balance
I like your flow, it runs like a stream of thought wisely avoiding the temptation to moralize, long may it run.
posted by
C_C_T
on January 17, 2010 at 5:32 AM
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6 I’m glad that you’re here. On the bus I met a black woman that hated whites. She called me you know. I remembered a professor that said a white person doesn’t know what it’s like to be black. I said that I was sorry. In other words I apologized for history. However I identify with your poem as a white man. I’m not confident based on race or myself. But, I’m poor from the healthcare situation and didn’t make money enough in stocks with an unwise day trader. So I might identify even with her. Similarly to what you wrote but I applied to so called machismo; I identify with your poem but as a man. You’re an athlete? I know that playing sports affects your ego, mood, and emotions. It might affect girl athletes in particular. In any event take care love. BC-A, Bill’s RJLst
posted by
BC-A
on January 16, 2010 at 8:53 PM
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your words are a painting
a beautiful painting of what sits in your sould
posted by
Tzippy
on January 15, 2010 at 9:36 PM
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You are a poet... that is why we here call what you write poetry :-) not to "whiten" your words.. or to make them conform to our view of what it should be... but because what you write has music and balance and rhythm , it touches the heart, it makes us think and react and feel. Rap is poetry... its words are drenched in the feelings and emotions of everyday life.... and like life, rap sometimes is violent, sometimes tragic, or funny or militant... but it IS poetry. You ARE a poet my friend and its nothing to be ashamed of but proud, very proud. You have a unique style and a way to pour your emotions into simple sentences in a way that they move who reads you. That IS poetry :-) xoxoxo
posted by
Sinome
on January 15, 2010 at 6:01 PM
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I really liked this one! It is filled with so much! sam
posted by
sam444
on January 15, 2010 at 5:49 PM
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I like how your thoughts flow together. You addressed so much in such a small space.
posted by
FormerStudentIntern
on January 15, 2010 at 5:44 PM
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Terrific, you need to check out Charles Payne... Google it.
You are not too much anything. You are not too little anything. You are YOU, the one God created to be a special one different than all the others, keep knowing you are IT!
posted by
Justi
on January 15, 2010 at 4:13 PM
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I like rap
That was great !! It did flow very well....and I think most writers think to much!
Mia
posted by
momma_mia
on January 15, 2010 at 3:19 PM
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Stylish
posted by
malcolm
on January 15, 2010 at 1:23 PM
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Hey this does sound like rap I am too old to work that out for myself. LOL
I LIKE IT I LIKE IT A LOT.......actually you sound perfectly enough not to be one of those awful people you never had to work hard for anything ....so they don't know how to value anyone
posted by
Kabu
on January 15, 2010 at 12:13 PM
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Enough is Enough
there is alot of enoughs in there, only one of them counts and is that your good enough !
posted by
BernieFranklin
on January 15, 2010 at 12:09 PM
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