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This is great
keep it coming.
posted by
StrickGold
on November 23, 2009 at 2:03 PM
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I like the story! But, just a suggestion: when you offer the descriptive words with the dialogue, it takes the reader away from the conversation. I like it when it is presented like people talk. sam
posted by
sam444
on November 21, 2009 at 6:26 PM
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This is really good writing and I like it.
posted by
Darson
on November 20, 2009 at 8:43 PM
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