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Awsome! You wrote this well smoothed the flow the ending oh my God! Kill It
Your ending to this poem broke the mold of ending. Whoa!
posted by
Mystereo
on December 14, 2008 at 10:05 AM
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WoW .......jake, it's very touching
posted by
Star5_
on December 3, 2008 at 8:07 PM
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WoW .......jake, it's very touching
posted by
Star5_
on December 3, 2008 at 8:07 PM
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wonderful and touching
posted by
hazel_st_cricket
on November 14, 2008 at 1:04 PM
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Nicely expressed..
posted by
Katray2
on November 14, 2008 at 9:01 AM
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Jake, good poetry. . . be careful of spelling and verb tenses. . . my writer's group always gets me on those too
posted by
Annicita
on November 14, 2008 at 6:25 AM
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Re: comment
So true, yes I believe you are right but such has already happened, I have found my other mate but my past experience leads me to write these poems so that others may understand that they are not alone no matter how much it feels that way.
thanks for your thoughts keep'em coming.
J.
posted by
drakeb
on November 13, 2008 at 11:06 PM
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All You Wrote
It sounds to me, like the other was out for one thing. A hot Summer fling. The best cure for Heartache, is a new mate.
posted by
demultiflex
on November 13, 2008 at 10:55 PM
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just hangin there, will get better for both of you!
posted by
Star5_
on November 13, 2008 at 9:13 PM
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