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I like this one because it touches me in my depths, and perhaps something I've moved thru and never resolved (by necessity)...it kind of skirts thru my soul, how alone we can be in our own universe. Love how you write bringing to light the shadows,fragility,and the uncertainty of existence thru quivering lines, while positing them with/against the statement within that moment...felt like I was just a heartbeat away from your voice.
Especially liked how it was written--in short, clear stanzas, which seemed to amplify the inner voice, and I was drawn to the inner rhythm. I think this is one of your best.
I said once before that I don't always know what you are saying, but I like how you say it. But this one got me pinpointed, drawing me to the precipice, and the dizzying possibility of falling into my own black hole.
And I got to tell you...turned out, for me, to be an enthralling experince!!
posted by
jfm32
on October 26, 2008 at 8:58 AM
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very nice! thank you for all the calling cards.
posted by
muley12
on October 25, 2008 at 11:52 AM
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I can really sink my teeth into this piece love ***** w/TLC, BCA ***** Bill*s Wave:: Float on
posted by
BC-A
on October 25, 2008 at 10:41 AM
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Sometimes words echo into emptiness like walking backwards when we want to see them waveback!
posted by
merkie
on October 24, 2008 at 4:20 PM
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I hear ya, sometimes it takes Good Bye for another to realize there never should have been a Good Bye. The great thing about a Good Bye is it never has to be forever, unless "you" want it to be.
posted by
godsome
on October 24, 2008 at 4:13 PM
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Beautiful and haunting work..
posted by
Katray2
on October 24, 2008 at 11:59 AM
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Wow.
posted by
strat
on October 24, 2008 at 5:13 AM
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Please don't say good bye my friend ...
posted by
afzal50
on October 24, 2008 at 3:49 AM
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Good Bye is not Always Good Bye
I have been to good bye. It is not the only way. Have you read "The Dance"? It is not a pleasant experience if you only remain in gray. You can never find the colors. Your soul is not free to fly.
posted by
skye08
on October 24, 2008 at 2:16 AM
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goodbye is not a bad thing at times, but gives you peace of mind......
posted by
Star5_
on October 23, 2008 at 9:12 PM
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it's true. suicidals are the ones who usually don't talk about it
posted by
Luz_Briar
on October 23, 2008 at 8:48 PM
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Jen... Goodbye is something should only be said once... and only when its meant to be a real adieu but regretably as you so beautifully express in your poem, sometimes we have to say it over and over again for those who do not take us seriously. I for one wish you never say goodbye to us, for I would miss you too much. You have a gift my friend... and your gift is a demanding master, it demands that you create beauty in sadness and hope... and no one does it like you. Take care of yourself and be proud because you are truly a great poetess.
posted by
Sinome
on October 23, 2008 at 8:31 PM
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