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Looking forward

to the next one already

posted by malcolm on October 18, 2008 at 4:14 AM | link to this | reply

Mason and Malcom

i'm glad you enjoyed it! i will probably have another one up soon

posted by Luz_Briar on October 17, 2008 at 2:58 PM | link to this | reply

Lionreign

thanks. theyre will certainly be more stories to come, particularly about the lower realms

posted by Luz_Briar on October 17, 2008 at 2:57 PM | link to this | reply

...what a trip!

...brava! ...looking into the abyss.. and the abyss looks into you..

posted by MasonGarrett on October 17, 2008 at 11:07 AM | link to this | reply

Very well written

and really captivating

posted by malcolm on October 17, 2008 at 11:00 AM | link to this | reply

This has a lot of good stuff in it

You were right to not describe the pastor - let us each attribute to him a visage of our imagining - much more effective   I would have liked to have seen a little more in the lower realms, but maybe that's just my fascination.

I am looking forward to the next parts though - great job!

posted by lionreign on October 17, 2008 at 4:47 AM | link to this | reply

Thanks, Sam!

and yes,  Pastor is a sweetheart

posted by Luz_Briar on October 16, 2008 at 9:50 PM | link to this | reply

Captivating and very well written. No one is impervious to fear, dreadful fear. What a sweet thing to do at the end too! sam

posted by sam444 on October 16, 2008 at 4:41 PM | link to this | reply

Symphony

thanks so much for your opinion! and yes, there will certainly be more. i'm no Tolkien, but i have this mythical world i'd love to share if people want to read.

posted by Luz_Briar on October 16, 2008 at 3:39 PM | link to this | reply

This was a great story....it had me wanting to read more and more...

I even felt sad...but glad that he sent her a pet.....is there gonna be more to come...will the pet grow big, have wings and fly her out of there and ....hehehe I was getting carried away....a great story...I loved it!! and no you didn't have to describe him, I imagined him...Thank you for sharing...

posted by _Symphony_ on October 16, 2008 at 3:04 PM | link to this | reply

Projected Menace...what do yall think?

also, for anyone who read: how do you like the 'projected menace' of Pastor? since he's fear i've left it up to you to decide what he looks like. but would it have been better if i described him for you? what's your opinion.

posted by Luz_Briar on October 16, 2008 at 2:56 PM | link to this | reply

this is brand new...meaning, i wrote it all out just today, though i've had the idea for a while. i proofread it and all but nothing can be perfect. hope you enjoyed

posted by Luz_Briar on October 16, 2008 at 2:17 PM | link to this | reply