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Great poetry _  I actually envisioned Pink Floyd's "The Wall" ~   --- Great poetry ~ You're an Artist!~ Elyse

posted by elysianfields on July 27, 2008 at 11:56 AM | link to this | reply

MarineAir it's always a great ride with you

posted by Smittenheimer on July 26, 2008 at 11:53 PM | link to this | reply

Marineair, I had a Mom whom this reminds me of..her way of "pushing" was

simply to say, "You can do better than that." (it helped, but it hurt, too)

This is an interesting format I haven't seen in quite some time.....

posted by Rumor on July 25, 2008 at 9:04 PM | link to this | reply

Good work buddy

excellent choice of subject for this exercise -very effective

posted by lionreign on July 25, 2008 at 12:45 PM | link to this | reply

Mama, can you hear me

 . I feel it now, trying to finish my screenplay. Take care, BCA , “Top of the Stairs”  

posted by BC-A on July 25, 2008 at 5:13 AM | link to this | reply

Superbly done my friend!

This is a style I really like - it has a a certain flow that other forms lack..... very well done; thank you and God bless

posted by mariaki on July 25, 2008 at 3:19 AM | link to this | reply

Sheer brilliance...

posted by DeeJay101 on July 25, 2008 at 1:49 AM | link to this | reply

posted by NiteTide on July 24, 2008 at 6:21 PM | link to this | reply

beautiful

posted by 9STAR on July 24, 2008 at 5:37 PM | link to this | reply

Marineair, It definitely speaks to me.  As mother of four sons and grandmother of eight grandsons, I've probably done my share of attempting to encourage and stand with and for the young man fighting for growing and doing what is right.  You did a good job here.

posted by TAPS. on July 24, 2008 at 4:23 PM | link to this | reply

Sweet

posted by NiqueKennon on July 24, 2008 at 3:57 PM | link to this | reply

Not a girl, not yet a woman

I hate to quote Brittney Spears, but...

Very interesting angle of the build up. Think I might try that one day

 

posted by Lotus_Flower on July 24, 2008 at 3:53 PM | link to this | reply

Very nicely done

For so many it is a hallow cry for help in the passage to adulthood.

posted by skye08 on July 24, 2008 at 3:06 PM | link to this | reply