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I bow before genius

Chris, you have detailed views that I vehemently share in a manner far more powerful than I ever could.  I was going to point to this line or that to show where I thought the poem was at it's best, but I'd have to copy the whole thing in here.

posted by lionreign on July 19, 2008 at 6:42 AM | link to this | reply

Thanks so much for reading!

NiteTide, Rumored, vickip, contagion_publishing, mariaki, Kobriel, Troosha, wigopa, mysteria and everyone who has contacted me offline.  Thank you SO, SO much for your wonderful feedback and comments.  It means a lot to me to have you affected by Endgame in the manner that you are.  Stay tuned for more!

mysteria, No I have never read open mic, but I do see the value with a piece like this.  When I write, I'm more concerned with pacing and rhythm than I am with numbers of syllables and exact rhymes.  In my mind, these poems sound the same everytime, but to someone else, they may not have the same dramatic impression that I do of my own pacing.  Good thoughts, but there aren't many open mics here in Japan...outside of kareoke parlors.

Thanks again to all,

-Chris

posted by Marineair on July 18, 2008 at 2:40 PM | link to this | reply

Christopher, I don't have to tell you that you have a great gift

And passsionate!!!  Wow...you REALLY feel things.  You give emotions a good name and what a great media for your message.  Wonderful combination.  I am wondering do you recite your work? live mic nights and such?  I would like to hear it expressed.  Make a vid on youtube ! 

posted by mysteria on July 18, 2008 at 12:35 PM | link to this | reply

Haunting work here...I sit on the edge of my seat awaiting more....

posted by Wigopa_ on July 18, 2008 at 10:40 AM | link to this | reply

Marineair

Wow  - you bring some disturbing truths to the page.  An excellent piece. 

posted by Troosha on July 18, 2008 at 8:32 AM | link to this | reply

Frightening!

   But I felt hints of "unlimited ones" still going about. Though you didn't mention them. I was very touched by this, I nearly cried because so many people are brainwashed and limited....and I see it and I just want to yell wake up!

posted by Kobriel on July 18, 2008 at 5:43 AM | link to this | reply

Scary isn't it??

so many of us know this is happening and still go for it every time!  Excellent work; thank you and God bless

posted by mariaki on July 18, 2008 at 3:23 AM | link to this | reply

posted by contagion_publishing on July 17, 2008 at 10:09 PM | link to this | reply

The media are famous for telling us what we 'pay' to hear.... few know

the true bias of the press and marketing gurus of network news.  Dan Rather was the biggest whore of them all.  These are great lines, well done:

Reality is scripted, biased truth is televised
Ignoring our own instincts, faith detached and anarchized
Every day a new transgression, every day a portent of doom
Always an impending disaster coming soon to your living room

posted by VictoriaP on July 17, 2008 at 9:34 PM | link to this | reply

Marineair, I have some catching up to do, but this is almost frightening...

We really are brainwashed by the media (or close to it).  Reality becomes fantasy and fantasy becomes reality....no wonder we're in trouble.....

posted by Rumor on July 17, 2008 at 6:57 PM | link to this | reply

we're DOOMED.  (I'm with Soul Builder, by the way)

posted by NiteTide on July 17, 2008 at 5:30 PM | link to this | reply

Soul_Builder101

Thank you so much for saying so.   - Chris

posted by Marineair on July 17, 2008 at 3:09 PM | link to this | reply

Best poem I have read in a long time that probes the present reality in an incisive way! You have done well!

posted by Soul_Builder101 on July 17, 2008 at 3:06 PM | link to this | reply