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posted by
star4sky5
on December 20, 2007 at 7:49 PM
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posted by
star4sky5
on December 20, 2007 at 7:49 PM
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You have said it well. That is what you want to say. Nothing else is important here.Happy holidays.
posted by
EX_TURPI
on December 20, 2007 at 11:02 AM
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Nicely done...
posted by
saul_relative
on December 18, 2007 at 8:48 PM
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posted by
Soul_Builder101
on December 18, 2007 at 7:53 PM
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Too many words for the path you are given (in my opinion)
if less is more, consider minimalization. If you can give me the word that gives me the picture--why would you go further? You have given me your idea of something (which I know you are not sure of yourself because you re-describe it, not for me, but for yourself). Don't worry, every poet goes thru this process. and we all begin from the someplace.
I guess all I'm saying is that editing is an invaluble process, and if you just went back into your poem and highlighted the words that resonated to you--they would probably be the same words that resonate to me, and, perhaps, these are the only words that should be there.
For myself, poety is a wonderful media. It's the only place I can communicate with myself, while talking to someone very directly, while hoping to knock both our socks off. I think the key is the picture of a word.
posted by
jfm32
on December 18, 2007 at 6:58 PM
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your right very few ever find the truth God bless
posted by
spinner
on December 18, 2007 at 6:30 PM
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