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Ariel,
for some reason I never got around to thanking for your comment - I'm doing it now, and at the same time wish you many more years of happiness with the Lady Ariela - even if you'll never see this - since you will probably never come back here...
posted by
Nautikos
on July 18, 2006 at 12:11 PM
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muser,
thanks for your extensive comment. I think I've got the AB etc. structure right, as for the rest...the other problem was that I didn't know how to do the line spacing properly Meanwhile I have learned how to do that, but I'm not quite up to re-posting this thing in it's proper form...
posted by
Nautikos
on July 18, 2006 at 12:04 PM
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nautikos, I think your sonnet is lovely...a different approach for sure
It looks to me thatyou have done this; now didvide your lines into groups of: 4,4,4,2
The following sonnet rules are from Dummies.com... Sonnets
I still use this guide.
"Time to pay your dues. Try writing a sonnet.
Here are the rules:
* It must consist of 14 lines.
* It must be written in iambic pentameter (duh-DUH-duh-DUH-duh-DUH-duh-DUH-duh-DUH).
* It must be written in one of various standard rhyme schemes.
If you're writing the most familiar kind of sonnet, the Shakespearean, the rhyme scheme is this:
A
B
A
B
C
D
C
D
E
F
E
F
G
G
Every A rhymes with every A, every B rhymes with every B, and so forth. You'll notice this type of sonnet consists of three quatrains (that is, four consecutive lines of verse that make up a stanza or division of lines in a poem) and one couplet (two consecutive rhyming lines of verse).
Ah, but there's more to a sonnet than just the structure of it. A sonnet is also an argument — it builds up a certain way. And how it builds up is related to its metaphors and how it moves from one metaphor to the next. In a Shakespearean sonnet, the argument builds up like this:
* First quatrain: An exposition of the main theme and main metaphor.
* Second quatrain: Theme and metaphor extended or complicated; often, some imaginative example is given.
* Third quatrain: Peripeteia (a twist or conflict), often introduced by a "but" (very often leading off the ninth line).
* Couplet: Summarizes and leaves the reader with a new, concluding image."
posted by
muser
on July 15, 2006 at 11:37 PM
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Nautikos
Oh yes! Yes, and yes again!
Beautiful! We should be ashamed if we write sonnets,poems, billet doux, or whatever to any but our wives or lovers.
In my case, Lady Ariela's both.
Bin wed 36 years, and still love the gal as much as when we met.
And that, amigo, is some blessing, let me tell you!!!
posted by
ariel70
on June 12, 2006 at 10:08 AM
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Thank you, Justso...
the problem is that, outside of the occasional piece like this or a haiku every now and then, there isn't enough there there for a whole blog...
posted by
Nautikos
on February 15, 2006 at 5:39 PM
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Nautikos, my mariner friend that was beautiful It is time for your poetry
blog to open for business. Be blessed.
posted by
Justi
on February 15, 2006 at 5:31 PM
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FLIGHTPATH...
thanks for stopping by. One of these days I'll even get around to satisfying people's curiosity about this blogger...
posted by
Nautikos
on February 15, 2006 at 7:52 AM
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Thanks, Corbin...
I won't deny that I like compliments...
posted by
Nautikos
on February 15, 2006 at 7:49 AM
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Beautiful poem, Nautikos! Welcome to Blogit; and when you've time, I hope you'll post an About Me page.
posted by
reasons
on February 14, 2006 at 11:11 PM
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Well, you did a heck of a lot better than most of us could........
posted by
Corbin_Dallas
on February 14, 2006 at 8:17 PM
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Thank you, Burly,
it may be a case of
mutual misunderstanding, as sometimes happens between friends.
posted by
Nautikos
on February 14, 2006 at 3:49 PM
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Nautikos
What a lovely expression. A Canadian with soul. Many Americans wouldn't have thought it. Thank you. Burly
posted by
Burly
on February 14, 2006 at 2:16 PM
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