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lives
posted by
kingmi
on January 25, 2005 at 8:03 PM
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rusades, you got it right, exactly. inbetween past lievs. Yep. I like it
posted by
kingmi
on January 25, 2005 at 8:02 PM
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Inbetween Past Lives
Very descriptive, exhilirating......9.3/10
posted by
Rusades
on January 25, 2005 at 7:59 PM
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Kay-Ren, Thanks for reading.
posted by
kingmi
on January 23, 2005 at 12:13 PM
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Wow! I loved the journey you took me on with this poem, from the past to the present, then the blending of the two. Beautifully and powerfully done! Bravo!
posted by
Kay-Ren
on January 23, 2005 at 12:00 PM
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Ben, Thnaks!
posted by
kingmi
on January 23, 2005 at 8:02 AM
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Nice refinement into vintage stuff.
Ben.
posted by
A-and-B
on January 22, 2005 at 10:59 PM
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Exstud2006, It was just him thinking of how he was going to kick
some bad guys out of the club. Ya know? I'd like to see your version of your poem, re-written. i found it very strong!
posted by
kingmi
on January 22, 2005 at 8:54 PM
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I read this and the advice for poetry improvement in the previous post. Very helpful advice from Mr. Moyers indeed! And I like your poem -- very descriptive and powerful -- but I would have to read it again closely to really understand its central theme and purpose.
posted by
Dyl_Pickle
on January 22, 2005 at 8:21 PM
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MandaLee, high praise indeed. Thank you!
posted by
kingmi
on January 22, 2005 at 3:01 PM
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Kingmi, You write so beautifully! I can't wait to hear what follows after
the Junior College part.
Fantastic post!
Mandy
posted by
Amanda__
on January 22, 2005 at 2:57 PM
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