Night's Soft Breath

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Thursday, July 17, 2008

commentary and feedback request for Heart of The Night City and Riversong

The background of this poem is that it was written one night after walking through the Tenderloin in San Francisco, I think I was returning from a night of listening to some house music. I had just acquired a place after a year of enduring some shiftlessness myself in regards to my housing... Sign in to see full entry.

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commentary and request for feed back on three poems

two poems that i posted a while ago, The Ballad of Yin and Yang and From Sky To Mouth, have gotten some good feedback. however, i am frustrated with them because they are not finished, they read like snapshots of images that don't have a solid, thematic connection. some feedback and editing would be... Sign in to see full entry.

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Heavy Cruelty(repost)

i posted this one a while ago, feedback is always appreciated Heavy Cruelty I don't love you I never could with your heavy cruelty like paper cuts on your tongue you dig into me so well and peel me back so far until I'm raw as a shredded fingernail you are so cold and cool running your heart like a... Sign in to see full entry.

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Journey Entry

Everything is wild, undetermined These mummy wrappings are unraveling fast And flying away in the rough wind As I fly away in George's car Looking out at the cow fields And feeling the spiraling color of uncertainty My soul is letting out its large, white sail I have been opened like a spiritual... Sign in to see full entry.

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Sovereign of The Night

Sovereign of The Night You are my sovereign, bird of the night With your soft large breast And sweet song You rule my dreams With visions of your outspread wings That house my sorrow in the bed Of your dark feathers Black ink blue as the nocturnal sky Tender and noble bird You bow your head to me To... Sign in to see full entry.

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Response to Five Things Every Poet Should Know(via email to ma bladgen)

ma, i don't know if i responded to u already about this...i have spent some time away... anyway, if u are still here, i wanted to say thatour culture is very mind and head oriented, and it is very difficult to deconstruct that. remember, these are just guidelines, you can take or leave them for what... Sign in to see full entry.

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Sunday, August 20, 2006

3 New Poems

The Ballad of Yin and Yang there is the dawn the fire of new beginnings struck hot with flames piercing the cool rythm of black forests thick with trees of concrete there is the dawn of your ghost impregnating the streets being forced into the new day with sunlight spilling over like a mother's... Sign in to see full entry.

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Saturday, August 19, 2006

RIVER SONG

In the dim of the night I have prayed for you inside the fractured folds of my broken woman spirit for you to fly fast between the space of cold, empty sheets and rock me like the lapping desire of dreamy rivers made smooth in the break of early morning time churn the sediments of emotion laid still... Sign in to see full entry.

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EXAMPLE OF STRONG USE OF END RYHME

Heartache in the A.M. is an example, first off, of writing in your own backyard...writing about something that YOU know, a theme that is personal for you. This is just an example of a measured use of end rhyme, and I actually did not intend for the hips and lips line to rhyme, it just came out this... Sign in to see full entry.

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EXAMPLE OF STRONG USE OF END RYHME

Heartache in the A.M. is an example, first off, of writing in your own backyard...writing about something that YOU know, a theme that is personal for you. This is just an example of a measured use of end rhyme, and I actually did not intend for the hips and lips line to rhyme, it just came out this... Sign in to see full entry.

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