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Re: Annicita
I apologize for forgetting my manners! It's really quite good and intriguing. It is so ingenious how you use the play on words for the main character (regardless of which side of the aisle one sits) and I just love the use the name of "Elysians." Maybe an adjective such as international, billionaire, ruthless, high-powered, selfish - or whatever your choose - before "businessman" would be good for Amazon readers to see, even though you go on to describe him. Just a thought. 
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Sea_Gypsy
on September 4, 2020 at 12:55 PM
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sounds interesting ...sort of reminds me of someone I won't say who!!!!!
posted by
Kabu
on September 4, 2020 at 12:54 PM
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It piques one’s interest! You need a comma after “businessman” and after “employees,” though. 
posted by
Sea_Gypsy
on September 4, 2020 at 11:01 AM
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I think that it is descriptive and intriguing.
posted by
Sherri_G
on September 4, 2020 at 10:33 AM
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Yes pretty good A . I guess it is the first paragraph that sells a book.
posted by
C_C_T
on September 4, 2020 at 10:27 AM
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Mystery
I write children's books so for me my books are very lighthearted. I would say if you write for adults it's whatever you want your book to be. You seem like such a good writer. My imagination is always off and running and I think in terms of fantasy. Adult mysteries would be hard for me but I think you will do awesome with any idea that you have.
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Goldiec
on September 4, 2020 at 10:16 AM
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