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beautiful, you really can paint pictures.....never heard of this mountain, but now it is famous to me.
posted by
overtherainbow
on July 24, 2015 at 10:46 AM
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Well you put the feel of it there V. Well done.
posted by
C_C_T
on July 21, 2015 at 11:07 AM
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Re: Thank you, Taps.
posted by
Vermont01
on July 21, 2015 at 7:58 AM
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Re: Thank you, BC-A
posted by
Vermont01
on July 21, 2015 at 7:58 AM
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Re: Thank you, Chuck.
posted by
Vermont01
on July 21, 2015 at 7:57 AM
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Re: Thank you, Kabu.
posted by
Vermont01
on July 21, 2015 at 7:57 AM
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Re: VT01
Krisles, thanks for the advise.
posted by
Vermont01
on July 21, 2015 at 7:56 AM
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Re: Vt
Naut, thanks for the input. Yes, a failed creative attempt.
posted by
Vermont01
on July 21, 2015 at 7:55 AM
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Re: FSI, thanks for visiting.
posted by
Vermont01
on July 21, 2015 at 7:54 AM
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The stories the mountain could tell...
posted by
FormerStudentIntern
on July 21, 2015 at 5:19 AM
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Vt
I like the way you evoke the fateful power of the mountain...But there's a little thing that irritates me: It should be 'many a hiker has', or else 'many hikers have'...I know in poetry we have licence to explore creative new ways of using language, but bad grammar is not one of them...
posted by
Nautikos
on July 20, 2015 at 7:42 PM
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VT01
Another one I would like to see you hold onto and visit again someday. I like this but would really like to see you expand on the feeling and mood behind it with less of the clear descriptive wording.....and experiment more with atmosphere. Like, I took word groupings I liked in it and easily made a haiku: Clouds that circle by...Its mood can change suddenly...It casts its shadow. That was easy (not very good, but illustrative, I hope!) because you have the mood in here and I guess that's what I would like to see you expand on and expand this piece. Just IMHO. :) emoticons not working!
posted by
Krisles
on July 20, 2015 at 7:20 PM
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Like Taps I like this too. We can think we are better than everyone else, tougher, bigger larger than life....Nothing like nature throwing all she has at us to bring us down, perhaps even take our life.
posted by
Kabu
on July 20, 2015 at 6:29 PM
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Good imagery describing the high mountains
posted by
Chuck_E_Ibrahim
on July 20, 2015 at 4:30 PM
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🐝A great view of poetic imagery. BC-A, Bill’s R👀st
posted by
BC-A
on July 20, 2015 at 2:14 PM
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I like that--a lot. I've seen a lot of mountains, climbed a few, seen the valley from way above the tree line. I'm getting older. Those mountains and valleys are old as the hills, but will remain forever young.
posted by
TAPS.
on July 20, 2015 at 1:00 PM
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