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Krisles--thank you but I still have to throw a couple of controversial ones out there,
from time to time. Well I guess I could but I have some things that bother me and I
think the best way to take care of them is to write about it.
posted by
Vermont01
on July 1, 2015 at 6:51 PM
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VT01
I think this is another one you should save and work on ....the title and concept I love...and the fact that you use the moon in every verse. The feel and the rhythm come through; my favorite line was: ...."for the moon to stay in one place"...and I would really like to see you build more dramatic and mature 'feel' and slight sensuality like that woven throughout. I think you can do that.
posted by
Krisles
on June 30, 2015 at 6:46 PM
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I hope this was before the landing V. It was very mysterious then. Quite nice though.
posted by
C_C_T
on June 30, 2015 at 10:27 AM
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Moonlight by Vermont
🎪 The lines light a romantic mood. BC-A, Bill’s Roost
posted by
BC-A
on June 29, 2015 at 3:18 PM
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v1
a charming picture you draw here, young and full of romance.
posted by
overtherainbow
on June 29, 2015 at 2:16 PM
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The moon lends itself to a lot of great imagery.
posted by
FormerStudentIntern
on June 29, 2015 at 5:25 AM
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Full of passion and Romance. I love it. Great poem. 
posted by
Kabu
on June 28, 2015 at 7:00 PM
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Vt
Again - I like it! You paint a mood with a charming 'romantic directness'...
posted by
Nautikos
on June 28, 2015 at 6:18 PM
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