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Yes very good indeed if this is your first attempt V. I like your intimate involvement.
posted by
C_C_T
on June 10, 2015 at 11:34 AM
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Re: FSI
Thanks again for the generous comment.
posted by
Vermont01
on June 9, 2015 at 5:13 AM
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Re: Chuck
Thank you, for the comment. I feel correcting a misspelling or misused word is the
easy part. What I need is someone to critique the poem itself. I read Robert Frost and
think--that guy's in a league of his own. How in the world could I ever come close to
that. Have a great day.
posted by
Vermont01
on June 9, 2015 at 5:11 AM
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Re: Taps
Thank you, for reminding me of my mistake. It's certainly not the first time. Another
one I have been famous for forgetting in the past is, to and too. This type of comment
is appreciated; if everyone gives you good comments without the bad, one will
develop their skills at a much slower rate.
posted by
Vermont01
on June 9, 2015 at 5:04 AM
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What lovely imagery you paint with words.
posted by
FormerStudentIntern
on June 8, 2015 at 6:34 PM
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Your first poem really hit my heart...I look at these 4 acres that I love and yes behind us is an area of untouched wet lands and wooded are but we are close to the road and will someone one day buy it and ruin it with cutting down the trees and perhaps ruining it's all of us who live here in peace.
posted by
Kabu
on June 8, 2015 at 6:20 PM
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I agree with TAPS but for me while I am reading I do the correction. Many other readers don't like to fix the words while reading. Overall I think its a good start so keep up the good work
posted by
Chuck_E_Ibrahim
on June 8, 2015 at 5:40 PM
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These are just lovely, so fresh, so descriptive. Because they are so good I cannot keep myself from telling you that you should make it a point to become familiar with the words their, there, and they're. It is so important because you do want people to read you without stumbling over pet peeves. In this first poem, it should be "They're comprised..."
posted by
TAPS.
on June 8, 2015 at 5:26 PM
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