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Re: Absolutely...I appreciate the constructive critique

posted by Shams-i-Heartsong on June 29, 2011 at 9:59 AM | link to this | reply

A little preachy to me from the hedgerow. More interesting to me is how you would relate and get entwined with your own thoughts while working them out for yourself. Your thoughts are interesting, but lack personal drama and an intimacy with literature. Get momentarily out of blogit, go to a book store, poetry section, and just read. Then start measuring yourself to what is possible, and find a voice you can listen to.

Form is everything, the craft and approach. Hope this helps.

posted by jfm32 on June 27, 2011 at 7:43 PM | link to this | reply

 I choose Love always ~

this was a powerful - affirmation and inspirational poem here.  Blessings to you,  Elyse

(this line carries: It is just the nature of love!
2001, ShamsuddinThere is no contest.
 ) and I thought maybe it needed a bit of edit?

 

posted by elysianfields on June 27, 2011 at 8:35 AM | link to this | reply