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This one has made me ponder in such a way that I can't stop. Well done.
posted by
Darson
on May 23, 2011 at 8:15 PM
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This was a fine poem and I could see the imagery throughout! Magnificent effort and the poem is reflective of that as well! sam
posted by
sam444
on May 11, 2011 at 9:03 PM
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Fantastic!
If I wasn't so hippy already, I'd let you send me an old pair of jodhpurs. But, I'm afraid I couldn't do them justice.
posted by
TAPS.
on May 11, 2011 at 7:24 PM
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Storytelling power! Lyrical and enjoyable work, CC
posted by
Raye09
on May 11, 2011 at 12:15 AM
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Re:
Right Jay I knew it would not be popular and you were right it did not end there. I just knocked the end lines off as I had posted it before I really don't know where the original is but it is floating around somewhere, I probably did not like the ending and could not spare the time to change it, Thank you for noticing, I can see I should have finished it and I will do later on. No I don't mind what anyone says,be lucky.
posted by
C_C_T
on May 11, 2011 at 12:12 AM
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When I started to read this I felt as though I was reading some old historic poem from one of the old masters maybe Milton or Cummings. It is a wonderful poem, but I wonder...you have three stanzas here each ending with a rhyming cuplet, yet the forth does not, and as a reader involved a such a wonderful and impressive piece of poetry, perhaps the best I have read here on blogit, I felt myself distracted when the forth stanza did not complete the pattern. Not that the ending wasn't powerful, and not that the poem wasn't wonderful, it was both of these, I just feel if you were to complete the pattern that this poem would be a master piece. I hope I am not being to forward.
posted by
UtahJay
on May 10, 2011 at 10:48 AM
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