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Just beautiful Nitetide..Loved the last verse.
posted by
shobana
on August 14, 2010 at 7:09 PM
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posted by
aceblade
on August 14, 2010 at 4:18 PM
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You have quite a nack for story verse. Well written and easy to read
posted by
jfm32
on August 14, 2010 at 3:31 PM
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AWESOME! I think you got every emotion and the results of those emotions! This is absolutely excellent! I thought of all the homeless children that flock to Portland, Oregon! But the most stirring line was the close for it is such a short time before the individual is grown and lost precious, safe moments with the poor decisions! sam
LOL, I chuckled at your comment on 'ass swatting.' Did you call your Mom?!
posted by
sam444
on August 14, 2010 at 1:49 PM
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Quite nice I find it harder to write like this whatever it's called because the flow is broken so easily. You have completed it quite nicely and told a story positively.
posted by
C_C_T
on August 14, 2010 at 12:43 PM
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wow Mindy... this poem, both parts, has greatness within. I read it again and again. Its excellent writing ! xoxoxo
posted by
Sinome
on August 14, 2010 at 10:05 AM
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