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posted by
Star5_
on December 17, 2009 at 4:48 PM
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First is more compact, but is missing the images of the lost
I would bring those in under the same lighthouse theme, suggesting ships seeking a harbor.
One of my favorite gospel songs "Master, The Tempest is Raging" has a similar theme.
Carl Peter
posted by
cpklapper
on December 17, 2009 at 8:09 AM
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Janey
I loved that, especially 'hope and love has entered the world' I feel that every year
posted by
WileyJohn
on December 16, 2009 at 5:10 PM
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Re: janey
abanerjee - "more from the heart" I think this may be true. My thoughts were scattered but my heart sorted it all out. Sometimes I just "think" too much. I appreciate your input. Thanks.
posted by
janey_
on December 15, 2009 at 11:39 PM
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janey
I see the rewrite even more from the heart since you say you gathered things that were scattered in the earlier version. Hey, excellent, Of Course!!!
posted by
anib
on December 15, 2009 at 11:22 PM
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Been there before! God lets me know I am not alone - don't know how I could make it without him. Thanks for the input!
posted by
janey_
on December 15, 2009 at 10:57 PM
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I thought it was better - more consistent in the image I was attempting to paint -
Thank you for giving me your input. very much appreciated
posted by
janey_
on December 15, 2009 at 10:55 PM
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You beautifully touch on the miracles
"For the empty and desolate heart".......
God lets them know they're not alone.
posted by
yellowrose55
on December 15, 2009 at 7:12 PM
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This one is actually much better.
It's great.
posted by
TAPS.
on December 15, 2009 at 3:54 PM
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Re: Re: Thank you for your comment!
You are very welcome! Any time I can help let me know! I will give a fair assessment so that the poem reveals it fullest imagery! On the study of numbers, you can click on BibleStudy.com and it will take you to the who portion dealing with the number I have cited! sam
posted by
sam444
on December 15, 2009 at 2:10 PM
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Re: Thank you for your comment!
Sam, I really appreciate your taking the time to compare both poems. I would like to become better at writing poetry. I have such a long way to go, so your input really does help me along. I value your input. Thanks again.
posted by
janey_
on December 15, 2009 at 1:35 PM
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I don't know what to say! I really liked the first one and then I did the comparing of the two poems and I still like the first one the best! sam
posted by
sam444
on December 15, 2009 at 4:20 AM
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