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it feels stark cold and lonely.

posted by Kabu on November 8, 2009 at 2:31 PM | link to this | reply

Train

Haunting! The whistle and the cold pierce the night.

posted by SFJoseph on November 8, 2009 at 12:39 PM | link to this | reply

Hear that lonesome whistle blow.

 I used to like the small freight train that passed through the night. Now I can sometimes hear the Amtrak Acela from my bedroom and always outside. It’s insight just around the corner. BC-A, Bill’s RJLst

posted by BC-A on November 7, 2009 at 6:29 PM | link to this | reply

RomaKay

I love the sound of the train too and have one out front on the farm across the way.

posted by WileyJohn on November 7, 2009 at 6:17 PM | link to this | reply

I sense 2 things here: You have a nack for the narrative, as well as knowing the meaning of what you are conveying. The print is a little large for me(I like 12pt/ no bold because I want to be told a story without entering someone's mind). That only means, like most any reader, I like to find things out for myself without being hit over the head.

What's the diff btw a story and a poem if it's not the approach to language and identities? Is there a diff btw the outside-in and the inside-out? Not much--its only the approach and the calibration of of language. In this one I hear both. Perhaps you might want to think about this.

posted by jfm32 on November 7, 2009 at 3:47 PM | link to this | reply

I hear while reading your post...see and hear, all senses come alive  Elyse

posted by elysianfields on November 7, 2009 at 9:36 AM | link to this | reply

Excellent In depth perspection......

posted by merkie on November 7, 2009 at 8:51 AM | link to this | reply