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Electric weather
stormy elements floating
in my tranquil heart
(Your writing is imaginative and always adventurous Kabu.
)
posted by
yellowrose55
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October 23, 2009
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Electric weather
stormy elements floating
in my tranquil heart
(Your writing is imaginative and always adventurous Kabu.)
posted by
yellowrose55
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October 23, 2009
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Kabu
Lord have mercy, you write faster than I can read.
posted by
Justi
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October 22, 2009
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I am late for this as well.. but I wanted to say I think it is lovely my dear. ~Peace
posted by
OTA.
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October 22, 2009
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Kabu
I like your poem, even if it isn't exactly a haiku - but you know that, having already been through the course (as usual, I was late in arriving for class, having to waste my time with things that are ultimately unimportant)...
posted by
Nautikos
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October 22, 2009
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Tranquility is what we're all after, after all.
posted by
Darson
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October 22, 2009
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My attempt....
In stormy weather
the electric elements
birth a tranquil heart
posted by
SpitFire70
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October 22, 2009
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Hi Darling, are we doing haikus too..lol. I think it's beautiful..anything with tranquility in it. Sounds like you. Have a lovely weekend my Kabu.
posted by
shobana
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October 22, 2009
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Lovely, Kabu. And thank you for the hugs - I need them!!
posted by
Rockingrector_retd
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October 22, 2009
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Well done Grandmummy! I have written two haikus myself I might post here...
posted by
lovelyladymonk
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October 22, 2009
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Just call it Haikabu and make it your own.
It definitely says what you want it to say.
posted by
TAPS.
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October 22, 2009
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It might comfort to think of the lightning in terms of physics love. BC-A, Bill’s RJLst
posted by
BC-A
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October 22, 2009
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Not having anything wise to say about it being correct Haiku or not I'll just say hello and wish you all the best.
posted by
elinjo
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October 22, 2009
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Haiku or not
It's very good indeed
posted by
lionreign
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October 22, 2009
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If it ain't Haiku, in the strict sense of the word,
it proves to me the pen's as good as a sword
to cut to the chase and describe the deed,
put a smile on our face, get us up to speed.
posted by
Pat_B
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October 22, 2009
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Though stormy weather
in my heart tranquility
electric rises
posted by
Troosha
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October 22, 2009
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You passed the ball and Sam's bicycle kick is into the goal. How's that for team work!
posted by
hardilaziz
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October 21, 2009
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You said help! lol This is one I would propose to get your Haiku in syllablic agreement! Just my humble thought my Kabu! Your sam I am
Stormy weather 'lec-
tric elements in my heart
ah, tranquility
posted by
sam444
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October 21, 2009
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Kabuiepie-;)
I love ALL your words and I don't know about Haiku or his sister Sushi.But, I love you
posted by
WileyJohn
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October 21, 2009
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Ah yes --- what a fabulous stream of thought here ~ inspired moment and I love Haiku and Haiku moments
~ I judged poetry for a while, Kabuski --- and there was often an argument about 'Haiku' and rules of and this and that. I studied the greats --- along with me dear hubby and he is a stickler...we came to the conclusion that it is just as you write...Your stream of thought, Your inspiration - inspired moment.
~ but if you would like to visit an interesting website:
http://www.haikuoz.org/haiku_musings/ --- The Australian Haiku Society
I love your writing Haiku ~ Write on!!!
Kabuski I love you ~ Elyse
posted by
elysianfields
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October 21, 2009
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I enjoyed a stormy rain-filled walk with my grandson today. Very fun and brought joy and peace to my soul. loved your poem
posted by
janey_
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October 21, 2009
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posted by
Samantha39
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October 21, 2009
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I'm not good with Haiku, but somehow you have to SHOW stormy
weather. Calling it stormy is telling, not showing...let me feel the rumble!
posted by
Ariala
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October 21, 2009
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its been a while since I did a Haiku but I know they 5-7-5 sylablles Christine is really good at them
yours is really cute
posted by
lustorlove
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October 21, 2009
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