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sinome it can't be that sad....

posted by 9STAR on June 17, 2009 at 9:39 PM | link to this | reply

Quite amazing.

posted by FormerStudentIntern on June 17, 2009 at 7:21 PM | link to this | reply

and as we pour our words onto the page they swim in sorrow, but all water and tears lead to the sea and meet all the other tears and as it all swirls together there becomes hope and the ocean is full of emotion on a grand scale but our tears are tiny drops so small so insignificant if we look at the grand scale of things. What a wonderful river of emotion drowning your page,   well written

posted by spiderfly on June 17, 2009 at 1:17 PM | link to this | reply

Sinome, sad and very moving...your similies are all worth many looks

and rend the heart and the memories.....

posted by Rumor on June 17, 2009 at 12:56 PM | link to this | reply

What an ending! I did not see it coming! It put that pizzazz in the poem even though sorrowful, it dressed it up magnificently! sammie loves you sweetie!

posted by sam444 on June 17, 2009 at 12:21 PM | link to this | reply

...until she can't help but bloom again.

posted by texture on June 17, 2009 at 11:00 AM | link to this | reply

I can envision the planet itself being the one drained of nourishment and so sorrowing. Piqued and bleak emotions .Sad teardrop!

posted by merkie on June 17, 2009 at 9:10 AM | link to this | reply

Beautifully expressed...sometimes we forget to balance the equation, and only subtract.

posted by snowview on June 17, 2009 at 8:39 AM | link to this | reply

wow... the beautifully crafted sadness of this piece is almost savage

in it's realisation.... it makes me want to write an assertion on second chances and new dawns in an attempt to nurture a smile.

Bright the day and bright it's dawning

On our return to gentled lands

Learn from mistakes and heed their warning

If one day you would understand:

True happiness is always respawning

To grasp it, just extend you hand 

posted by lionreign on June 17, 2009 at 7:28 AM | link to this | reply

How very sad Sinome

but perfect imagery of one placing so much dependence of their happiness on another...... beautifully done my friend; many blessings and thanks

posted by mariaki on June 17, 2009 at 4:26 AM | link to this | reply

Sinome

An absolute masterpiece. Excellent.

posted by shobana on June 16, 2009 at 9:19 PM | link to this | reply