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"I feel like I am a hangover to you" ~ Great description of how someone can make you feel unloved, uncared for and an annoyance. Like waking up next to your one night stand and cringing. Great work Sam!

posted by dpaulinomorris24 on February 1, 2009 at 11:43 AM | link to this | reply

I love the line "I feel like I'm a hangover to you, merely a drunken binge". Your poem crosses many lines of understanding and can mean so many different things.

posted by yellowrose55 on February 1, 2009 at 7:07 AM | link to this | reply

wow... a left hook that rhymes...

brilliant write, that shows so much... anger, pain, disappointment... 

posted by lionreign on January 30, 2009 at 11:21 AM | link to this | reply

 bull's eye, sam what power!!

posted by bythewindowsill on January 30, 2009 at 9:38 AM | link to this | reply

I feel like I am a hangover to you, merely a drunken binge... power-packed and stinging comment. Knockout poem this!

posted by hardilaziz on January 30, 2009 at 9:02 AM | link to this | reply

After that one, I think I'll go back to the Meditations & Devotions. 

posted by TAPS. on January 30, 2009 at 8:06 AM | link to this | reply

Powerful words, sam ~.~

Without honesty (and chastity)...   Great write! Thanks for sharing. Peace, blessings and understanding.~SS

posted by soulspeaker on January 30, 2009 at 7:35 AM | link to this | reply

I have to mull a little more over the chastity. That came quite as a surprise. The 'hangover' image though is brilliant.

posted by vogue on January 30, 2009 at 6:51 AM | link to this | reply

I don't know how you capture such emotions with such few words.

Brillant!

posted by MiaElla on January 30, 2009 at 6:37 AM | link to this | reply

Sam

I feel like I am a hangover to you  Oh, how I know this feeling but not in a million years would I have come up with this fabulous metaphor.  

posted by Troosha on January 30, 2009 at 6:27 AM | link to this | reply

A highly charged piece Shelly my dear

quite threw me actually!  I believe chastity went down the same road as chivalry my friend!  Excellent write; many blessings and thanks always

posted by mariaki on January 30, 2009 at 5:25 AM | link to this | reply

Wow, Sammy - have you been talking to my son's girlfriends? Great poem.  Mal

posted by gapcohen on January 30, 2009 at 4:39 AM | link to this | reply

Chastity? You kind of threw that in there at the end without any warning,

lol.  Thanks for putting up with my lapses in clicking back. I try to get caught up every so often, when I can.

posted by _Decshak on January 30, 2009 at 4:30 AM | link to this | reply

 wow dont hurt em super

posted by lestate7 on January 30, 2009 at 2:38 AM | link to this | reply

Brilliant

why does it seem that the simple things in life are so hard to find. honesty should be easy and come naturally, but alas.......hope your hurt will heal, and your wrath be sweet.i have to say farewell sam444 (with a heavey heart)i shall miss your words so.thank you so much for your comments on my rhyming, all i have learnt from you, your wonderful, wonderful, poetry, and your warm kind heart. hope to be back one day. do keep on writing with all your might.thank you again. 

posted by rubypoem on January 30, 2009 at 12:18 AM | link to this | reply

Very powerful, and laden with meaning! God bless. Nita.

posted by snowview on January 29, 2009 at 11:41 PM | link to this | reply

Sam444

Well done luv, I sensed the anger too and it is really well written

posted by WileyJohn on January 29, 2009 at 10:04 PM | link to this | reply

I have to agree with Sinome!

posted by calia14 on January 29, 2009 at 8:44 PM | link to this | reply

Wonderful

Truly powerful and feeling-filled piece of writing.  I could feel the lack of patience and irre in this piece.  Yes, I too wonder where the honesty is and what happened to chastity.  Today's world needs to read this one.  Alcohol must play a role in everything these days.  You'd think no one would drink if they only knew how much damage it does to the human brain.  It causes outright attrophy of the brain cells where it enters the brain at the base of the skull at the back and destroys ev erything that it comes in contact with thereafter.  Hapens everytime one takes a drink of hard liquor or soft liquor(but a bit slower).

posted by michaudblaine on January 29, 2009 at 8:20 PM | link to this | reply

Its not usual to find anger in your poetry Sammy... but this is passionate and raw, laden with feelings. I like it... it gives it a more human taste as oposed to the angelic , wise tone of all your other amazing poems.   Excellent,  one of your best  yet.

posted by Sinome on January 29, 2009 at 8:19 PM | link to this | reply

Very powerful indeed!

The anger and pain at the betrayal ring through loud and clear. Excellent piece!

posted by LadyGhost1970 on January 29, 2009 at 8:02 PM | link to this | reply

posted by RomaKay on January 29, 2009 at 7:57 PM | link to this | reply

chastity is gone

posted by lustorlove on January 29, 2009 at 7:54 PM | link to this | reply

wow, Shelly..so strong and powerful

like a black cat...hmmm I have a black cat, too.   xxxoo   lol   great poem.

posted by hazel_st_cricket on January 29, 2009 at 7:41 PM | link to this | reply